Fifteen years ago Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors Since that time Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and overall student | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the argument, the author concludes that Omega University should terminate student evaluation of the professors to enable its graduates to secure better jobs. The author comes to conclusion based on several premises ( grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect the student's achievement and the Omega graduates have not been successful at getting jobs as have graduated from nearby Alpha University). While the assertion from the author might prove true, as it stands now, the argument relies on three unwarranted assumptions that hinder its credibility.
First of all, the author assumes that professors give a higher grade to students to receive a better evaluation from the students, but that might not be the case. For example, the professor might have worked hard to provide better education to receive a better evaluation from the students. In addition, over the fifteen years, Omega University may have brighter students, the students might get a higher grade, and the teacher feels easy to teach them. If either scenario above proves true, then the author's argument that the professor gives higher grades to receive a better evaluation from the students does not hold water.
Moreover, the author presumes, without justification, that the source of the job recruitment is valid. However, this might not be true. For example, that might be the strategy of other universities to degrade the reputation of Omega University. In addition, the graduates from Omega University might have started their own business. In addition, the Omega University students might be research-oriented rather than industries oriented. If it is true that the information related to recruitment is invalid then the author's contention is considerably hampered.
Finally, the author assumes that Alpha University has not implemented the professor evaluation technique. However, that might not be true. For example, Alpha University might have implemented better teacher evaluation techniques that might have increased the recruitment from the Alpha University. In addition, Alpha University might have implemented other programs to secure good jobs. If either scenario above proves true, then the conclusion is not justifiable.
In conclusion, the author may be correct in concluding that students can secure better jobs if Omega University terminates students' evaluations of professors. However, as it stands now, the conclusion rests on three unwarranted pieces of evidence that hinder its validity. If the author would like to increase the persuasiveness of his conclusion, he needs to answer the three questions above.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... to conclusion based on several premises grades at Omega are inflated and do not ...
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...lated and do not accurately reflect the students achievement and the Omega graduates hav...
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...er scenario above proves true, then the authors argument that the professor gives highe...
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...iented rather than industries oriented. If it is true that the information related...
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...ated to recruitment is invalid then the authors contention is considerably hampered. F...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52736318408 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92888238429 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425373134328 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8307271019 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.80952381 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26682205226 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917208704536 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810743133486 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161821008244 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543999724593 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments