Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The claim that students at Omega University are not getting better jobs because of practice of student evaluation which has inflated marks of students. Hence, University should cease stdent evaluation of professors. Stated in this way, argument is full of assumptions and it fails to mention several key factors based on which argument could be evaluated. The conclusion is based on assumption for which ther is no clear evidence. Therefore, argument is weak, unsupported and has several flwas.
First, author readily assumes that introducing new process of staff appraisal by students is the only reason that has contributed to rise of overall student grade. One cannot deny that, many things could have changed over this time period that resulted in increase of overall performance of students. For instance, availability of computers and internet has increased due to which students have access to almost everything. So, they can get all the information required for their exams in internet. Similarly, university curriculam, faculties or exam structure could have changed which resulted in improvement of grades. Without considering these factors we cannot conclude the reason for grade improvement.
Second, there is direct correlation between staff appraisal by students and overall grade improvement. While it could be true that some lecturers give better grades hoping they might get better appraisal from students, there is no evidence to support this fact. Moreover, potential employres assume that grade inflation does not reflect students achievement. There is no evidence to support this assumption. Maybe, Students at Omega university are actually studying hard and getting good marks. So, without explicit evidences to potential employers assumption we cannot evaluate this argument.
Third, argument claims that Omega University students are as successfull as Alpha University students. Again, there is no data provided such as curricula involved in both the Universities, faculty members, IQ rate of students in both the Universities job opportunites to compare success rate of students. In addition to this, argument concludes that to aquire better jobs, Omega University should terminate staff appraisal by students. Again, there is no evidence to support the fact that how this could improve the success rate of students.
In summary, argument is full of assumptions, flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if author mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merit of a situation it is necessary to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Hence, University should cease stdent evaluation of professors.
Error: stdent Suggestion: student
Sentence: The conclusion is based on assumption for which ther is no clear evidence.
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Therefore, argument is weak, unsupported and has several flwas.
Error: flwas Suggestion: flaws
Sentence: Similarly, university curriculam, faculties or exam structure could have changed which resulted in improvement of grades.
Error: curriculam Suggestion: curricular
Sentence: Moreover, potential employres assume that grade inflation does not reflect students achievement.
Error: employres Suggestion: employers
Sentence: Third, argument claims that Omega University students are as successfull as Alpha University students.
Error: successfull Suggestion: successful
Sentence: Again, there is no data provided such as curricula involved in both the Universities, faculty members, IQ rate of students in both the Universities job opportunites to compare success rate of students.
Error: opportunites Suggestion: opportunities
Sentence: In addition to this, argument concludes that to aquire better jobs, Omega University should terminate staff appraisal by students.
Error: aquire Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1. One is enough.
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2166 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.429 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.817 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.336 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employers'' or 'employer's'?
Suggestion: employers'; employer's
...without explicit evidences to potential employers assumption we cannot evaluate this argu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, third, while, for instance, in addition, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58897243108 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90570133217 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531328320802 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2000374079 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9166666667 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186134878973 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554240316572 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477282102011 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100576308707 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317322371489 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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