In the preceding argument, the author states that Omega university ought to discontinue using students evaluation systems, due to undesirable results. However, the argument seems to be quite plausible at first glance, a closer scruting reveals that the statement above is not supported by evidence proffered.
To begin with,we do not know the nature and the new system procedure criterion. And what is the diminshen that reflect.Even though, there is a concrete and positive correlation between the inflated students grade average and evaluation the professors teaching affectiviness, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relations between the two events. And the author hastily assume that professor begun to assign higher grads, without looking to their academic performance, and mention a vague number like 30 percent does not reflect an abstract or detailed information about the studetns academic performance. Hence, to figure out the true status. a thorough investigation considering the levearage of all possible contribution is expected.
What is more, the employers prediction made in the argument is as reckless without any plausible evidances. So, making a result dependes on prediction that Omega students do not get jobs due to unreal grade average its totally unrealistic because getting a job needs more than grade average such as a past job experience, commuinty services. Moreover, the general comparison between to universities can be affected by multifarious variances and facts maybe blured, because every university has completely different system, that ends with useless compariosn. So, all the previous assumption per se is not reliable at all, then the extrapolation made based on that would not be valid in the first place.
In conclusion, terminate student evaluation of professor for the previous assumptions will do not substantiate the author's standpoints in the slight way. Thus, is clearly does not show the mandatory to end the evaluation system.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 306 350
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1648 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.386 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.933 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.142 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tinue using students evaluation systems, due to undesirable results. However, the...
^^
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
... by evidence proffered. To begin with,we do not know the nature and the new syst...
^^^
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
... And what is the diminshen that reflect.Even though, there is a concrete and positiv...
^^^^
Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d mention a vague number like 30 percent does not reflect an abstract or detailed...
^^
Line 3, column 593, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... detailed information about the studetns academic performance. Hence, to figure o...
^^
Line 3, column 655, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
.... Hence, to figure out the true status. a thorough investigation considering the ...
^
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employers'' or 'employer's'?
Suggestion: employers'; employer's
...ution is expected. What is more, the employers prediction made in the argument is as r...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, thus, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, what is more, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56907894737 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02279364548 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634868421053 0.468620217663 135% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0304012083 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.230769231 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 5.70786347227 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188912691914 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519328997578 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393876549674 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992690147102 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323159561 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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