In the following argument, the author claims that to burgeon the business the company has to hire employee need less that 6 hours of sleep per night, the conclusion of the argument is based on the premises. Firstly, the author is citing a study including 300 male and female indicating a correlation between their sleeping hours and the company success. Secondly, the study reporting that who need no more than 6 sleeping hours per night, will lead to higher profit and faster growth. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora on assumptions that could undermine the value of the argument.
To begin with, the argument readily states a study by stating 300 male and female, but there are multifarious factors in the study that remains elusive and untraceable. Such as, firstly, the sample size, it is representative for generalization for the whole people. Secondly, the kind of demographic data in the study for example, the age is a very important indicator for productivity, older people tend to sleep fewer hours per night than the young people and is not mandatory indicating more business flourish. Moreover, the gender differences, type of meals, presences of diseases and type of it. All these factors play the major role of sleeping hours number.
Second, even there is a positive and concrete relation between the fewer sleeping hours and more success, this does not necessarily indicate the conspicuous relation between the two events. In other words, the author fails to mention how they concluded this result, how the strong relation is. So, building decisions depends on weak study by hiring who sleep less than 6 hours to increase productivity is implausible.
Last but not least, the recommendation above for hiring people need shorter sleeping hours to thrive the work coming with none sense, and it is better to arrange real traits for the good worker such as their education degrees and majors, experiences they have, and extracurricular activities and workshops they did, in order to improve the company progress.
In conclusion, the argument fails to mention one of the key factors. Namely, the relation between fewer sleeping hours and more success and productivity was equivocal. So, without complete information, the argument unsubstantiated and open to debate.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- more arguments: suppose it works for advertising, doesn't mean it will work for other businesses.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1911 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.029 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.708 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.602 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.036 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...usive and untraceable. Such as, firstly, the sample size, it is representative fo...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20526315789 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79592104954 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8324505316 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.352941176 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.70786347227 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234641461129 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722299922179 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648112392566 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124725506614 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563984669416 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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