Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The Omega University recommends the abolition of professor evaluation procedure that was implemented 15 years ago. To support its claim, it points out to three evidences, namely students of Omega are not getting as much jobs as that of Alpha, students’ grades started to rise unconventionally and students’ grades does not reflect true achievement. Its chain of reasoning seems true at first sight, however, it is based on certain unwarranted assumptions about the relation between professor evaluation system and rise in grades. Therefore, in order to better evaluate the argument and analyse it logical soundness, additional explanation is required to establish the evidences that are foundational to the line of reasoning.

First of all, are students of Omega and Alpha comparable? It means, here it is assumed that students of Alpha and Omega are of equal quality. However it may not be the case since it may find that quality of students of Alpha has increased in the last 15 years due to strict and enhanced entry requirements, thus its students are in more demand among employers. On the other hand, Omega has relaxed or not updated its entry requirement, thus, its students are falling behind in the race for jobs. Further, it may also find that Alpha has implemented or updated its course curriculum as per the requirement of the employers, thus, its courses reflect the perfect match between classroom training and on the job training, and hence, students of Alpha are getting jobs faster than that of Omega, which may not have any course related to industry or business or if it has these courses, but they are not updated as per changes phased by the industry in the last 10 years. Thus, its students face severe mis-match between their curriculum and industry needs. Therefore, without considering these details, the recommendation remains unsupported.

Secondly, have grades increased because of only implementation professor evaluation system? In other words, it is assumed that professors started conferring higher grades because they believe in reciprocation. However, it may not be the case since it may find that professors follow strict procedures for evaluation of students and they are committed to moral practices, but with the increase in quality of students enrolled in the University in the last 15 years and their consequently better performance, they are being graded generously. Further, it may also find that in order to attract more employers to the campus where students have good grades, Omega has relaxed course requirements in terms of mitigating the complexities and difficulties in essential courses. Thus, Omega has made easy for the students to get good marks where professors are not doing anything with the hope of receiving good evaluation back but are helpless to give higher grades because of simple course and easy examination system. Therefore, without knowing the scope of the assumed relation, this approach cannot be considered accurately to support the claim.

Finally, are students grades inflated? In other words, it is assumed that students of Omega are not of good quality but their grades are high because of this professor evaluation system. However, it may not be the case since it may find that students are of good quality and their grades actually represent their potential but because they are failing in only interviews due to their poor communication skills since their courses are focussed on quantitative skills as required in the industry but they are not being taught communication or soft skills, thus, getting fewer jobs. Further, it may also find that industries are moving to a locations which is near to Alpha, thus employers are more comfortable going to the campus of Alpha and recruit from there and it may also find that students of Omega are not interested in getting jobs but rather starting up their own ventures in the emerging fields of data science because of their curriculum was focussed on quantitative skills. Therefore, unless the claim is fully representative, the argument is significantly weakened.

In conclusion, with the lack of comprehensive chain of reasoning, the recommendation, as it stands now, is unpersuasive. If the Omega is able to offer more evidence perhaps in the form of research study covering their course stringency, match between its courses and industry requirements, preference of employer with regard to Alpha, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...f Alpha and Omega are of equal quality. However it may not be the case since it may fin...
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Line 7, column 637, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a location' or simply 'locations'?
Suggestion: a location; locations
...also find that industries are moving to a locations which is near to Alpha, thus employers ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in conclusion, first of all, in other words, with regard to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 11.1786427146 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 28.8173652695 219% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 55.5748502994 187% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3797.0 2260.96107784 168% => OK
No of words: 726.0 441.139720559 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23002754821 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19079831727 4.56307096286 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92335991791 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 204.123752495 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.402203856749 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1192.5 705.55239521 169% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.469505053 57.8364921388 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.208333333 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.25 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29166666667 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274332217391 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096454343943 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739513450382 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169464950436 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585208478643 0.0628817314937 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 98.500998004 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 12.3882235529 129% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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argument 2 -- OK

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'To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.'

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 726 350
No. of Characters: 3694 1500
No. of Different Words: 273 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.191 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.088 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.796 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 264 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 215 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 150 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 95 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.592 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5