In the preceding argument, the author claims that the best treatment for insomnia as chronic disease is the scant in Lavender flowers. The conclusion of the argument is based on the premises. Firstly, citing a study on 30 volunteers suffering from chronic insomnia, and examining them, by taking their usual sleeping medication for a period and taking Lavender as a curable remedy for insomnia. In a controlled sleeping environment. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on the plethora of assumptions that could undermine the argument.
First of all, the argument citing a study on 30 volunteers suffering from insomnia, but fails to mention multifarious factors such as their age, gender, physical diseases, and lifestyle,that have a direct effect on their sleeping hours. For example, male adult tends to sleep less than young adult as a normal physiological needs. And taking a small sample to generalize the result over millions of people do not sleeping well is not reliable. In other words, fails to mention the controlling variables to conclude the assumption.
Secondly, the author states that volunteers for the first week have taken their prescribed medications in controlled sleeping rooms and the results were falling in deep sleep but wakened feeling tired. And the second week was with fewer sleeping hours and more feeling tired. As long as, the author fails to provide more significant information about the medications types sometime some medications have a side effect like feeling tired and drowsy, so, generalization the results are not true, furthermore, are all the 30 volunteers taking the same kind of medications, and what kind of controlling factors in their rooms the author meant is it light, sound, ventilation or temperature. Moreover, holding the medication for a week is not mandatory to have these results specially these kind of medications have a long effect on the human body and need long time for excretion. In short, without these details nothing toward bolstering the assumption.
Thirdly, the author claims, taking Lavender on the third week has a positive consequence by more sleeping hours and feeling comfort, but the plausible point what is the compositions of this flower, the effect of soporific on human is the same, thus, why doctors do not use it as a medication instead of the ineffective sleeping medication. So, without ruling out all the possible questions about this flower, the author fails again to support the situation.
In conclusion, the author fails to justify the argument about using Lavender flower as a remedy for insomnia. To be more convincing, the author should provide more information about all the previous flaws.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2239 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.077 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.686 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons that could undermine the argument. First of all, the argument citing a stud...
^^^
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
...gender, physical diseases, and lifestyle,that have a direct effect on their sleeping ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...n young adult as a normal physiological needs. And taking a small sample to generaliz...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 645, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs in their rooms the author meant is it light, sound, ventilation or temperature...
^^
Line 5, column 735, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er, holding the medication for a week is not mandatory to have these results spec...
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Line 5, column 783, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ndatory to have these results specially these kind of medications have a long effect on th...
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Line 5, column 904, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'details'' or 'detail's'?
Suggestion: details'; detail's
... for excretion. In short, without these details nothing toward bolstering the assumptio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in short, kind of, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25227272727 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84179168108 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481818181818 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 96.7663891649 57.8364921388 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.631578947 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6842105263 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244755850742 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787286063575 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819300469912 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141309813309 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737329879122 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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