The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an
anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the
island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that
children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than
by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews
with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia
show that these children spend much more time talking about
their biological parents than about other adults in the village.
This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about
Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the
observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as
well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate
students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more
accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in
other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is
needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence
would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In article of the renowned anthropologist Dr. Karp, it is stated that, the conclusion made by the study of Dr. field on island of tertia, based on the observation approach he concluded that children in tertia were reared by entire village than by their biological parents, is invalid and Dr. Karp suggest that his approach of interviewed centered is far better than Dr. field conclusion. Dr, Karp had come to this conclusion based on the interview which he had carried out in Tertia where the children were mainly talking about their biological parents than the other adults in village. Before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three question must be answered.
Firstly, Are the children properly aged to give the interview to the Dr karp? Does the interview given by the young age child be appropriate to come to this conclusion? Perhaps the children that the Dr. Karp interviewed can be of the small age _ as like of 5 years- than such children may not make difference about the role of their biological parents and their rearing parents about who are looking after their expenses and basic needs. May the children may be of small age and have given the interview without proper thinking and may have told about their biological parents as per fear to talk to the stranger who had came to take their interviews. Such fear on children is very common, So, if either of this scenario is true, than conclusion made by Mr. Karp is significantly weakened.
Furthermore, Does the views of some children in tertia and the conclusion based on that view be comparable and applicable to other society and culture? Perhaps the view obtained in the interview of the tertia may not be comparable to the view obtained in other culture and in other society. As the interviewing person can be of different maturity and different age due to which the response can also be different. So, based on the interview only to come to the conclusion in the prompt could be completely baseless.
Similarly, does the children chosen were completely impartial in their views or may not they be taught by some evil person to tell likewise inorder to invalidate the conclusion of the Dr. field? Perhaps the children who had given interview might have been taught by the foe of Dr field to tell like wise and report have been fabricated by the Dr. karp as per to invalidate the conclusion of the Dr. field. If this is true conclusion made is completely baseless.
In coming to conclusion, as it stands now, the argument is completely flawed due to its reliance on the baseless assumption. If author is able to answer three questions above and would provide more evidence. Than only the above prompt can be fully recommended and conclusion can be considered.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2229 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.732 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.096 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 621, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...er fear to talk to the stranger who had came to take their interviews. Such fear on ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tely impartial in their views or may not they be taught by some evil person to te...
^^
Line 4, column 408, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lidate the conclusion of the Dr. field. If this is true conclusion made is complet...
^^
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: SENT_START_THEM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Then'?
Suggestion: Then
... above and would provide more evidence. Than only the above prompt can be fully reco...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, look, may, similarly, so, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82802547771 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71470984195 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411889596603 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.6380611968 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178913283293 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059164563273 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890503265411 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108640323444 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102190452202 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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