Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
There is a general belief that, a persons should be known from their work and should be good from their heart but not from their outer appearances. Whereas, some people might like to be extravagant on their clothing to improve their appearances, while other prefer to be simple in their appearances. Personally, I agree to the prompt that nowadays people are spending too much of money on clothing to improve their appearances. I feel this way for two reasons which i will examine in this essay.
First of all, at present time people have become quite materialistic than the past. Flexing the high branded things such as clothes, gadgets have become fashion for the todays youth. Obviously, if today a person donot have such expensive materials than they would be outcircle from their freinds and co- workers. And further they would have to experience bullying in their workplace. For example , When i used to work in a esteem company as an data scientist. In the workplace i used to be in the normal dress, i used to carry the outdated phone and i was not familiar with the so called fashion of my colleagues. So, due to me being outmoded , ther e were no one in the office who used to hang with me. So, inferiority complex also made me to follow the fashion and to buy expensive thing i while i used to work in office. Hence, Not having fashionable dress not only make me alone in office , it also make me feel myself inferior.
Secondly, Social media have now become part of our daily life. Each and every person in the world have their account in one the social media platform. However, the social media especially after covid has become the site to show the body and to trend and become viral in such social media has become dream of todays teens. These dreams of people to get trend on social media has make them to spend too much money in their appearances. As it is true that to look good and sophisticated on social media people need expensive and branded clothes , which are making people spend too much money. This is best demonstrated by one of my personal experience. When i used to live in the kathmandu city for my job. There used to be a young girl near my house. Who was not so rich and used to stay in a small hut. But once when i was in a mall for shopping i saw her buying the clothes from the branded shop. When i return to home i saw her making video on the same dress and posting o the social media. So, despite her economical situation she was flexing her clothes on social media and spending so much on it.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that nowadays people spend too much money for appearances. This is because of the inferiority complex and the social media trends
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46356275304 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.424197151 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465587044534 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7893523909 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2962962963 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228568349077 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675202398216 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078861865049 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147277197783 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376543868721 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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