Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Some people think spending too much money on clothing to improve their appearance is an ideal way for people. However, personally, I believe that over-expenditure on clothing is not the right way for the people to live. I feel this way for the following three reasons
Firstly, spending to much funds on clothing can turn out to be a really bad idea because all the money that could be invested is spent on clothing. The money can be invested and can be later used for some better work like charity. For instance, me and my brother were exposed to the idea of investing when we were very young and we loved it. We started to research and started investing very soon, later when we were earning enough money we planned to donate a sum of our amount to charity every year. This has turned out to be the best idea because we were actually helping people and changing their lifes for good. To sum it all up, instead of spending a great deal of money on a clothes you can plan to buy something cheaper and decent and use the money saved to help someone in need.
Secondly, people now-a-days don't really have the time to judge other on their clothes, they are more intrigued with their minds. For example, the founder of famous billion dollor social media app facebook mark has been wearing the same pair of clothes. Being a owner of such a big company he would be looked up to by so many people and no one really cares of what he is wearing because people are more interested in what he has to say and what his ideas are. Therefore, I feel that in today's time people don't really care what you wear.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that using your money on clothing rather than something useful is one of the worst thing an individual can do. This is because people don't care what you wear and the money wasted on clothing can be used to invest or for charity to help someone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Suggestion: many
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a (clothes)' or simply 'clothes'?
Suggestion: a (clothes); clothes
...ad of spending a great deal of money on a clothes you can plan to buy something cheaper a...
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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...dividual can do. This is because people dont care what you wear and the money wasted...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40229885057 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26220796695 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3527722109 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.428571429 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245726718612 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947098628073 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742496675379 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161591799186 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726660427675 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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