Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
I totally agree with the statement that people now-a-days spend too much money on clothing. They do that because they want to improve their appearance. This can be explained only on the basis of what exactly are the reasons because of which people spend too money to buy clothes. I feel this way mainly because of the reasons that are mentioned below.
First of all, people think that their physical appearance is more important than their character, personality and their mental state. They are always influenced by the people around them. On the present day, social media has played a major role in making people think this way. People often think that they are being judged based on their looks not only in real life, but also on the internet. It is true that being properly dressed suitable to appropriate occasions is important and most of the times, one's appearance is judged on basis of that, but it is not at all necessary to hoard on clothes by making expensive purchases just because of people's judgements. My personal experience is a great example of this, one of my friends who is a social media addict bought a bunch of expensive dresses just because she was influenced by the trend. She bought it even though she knew that it wasn't right for her personality. Later, she contacted me for extra money to pay her rent. So, it is evident that people are being frivilous and spending loads of money on clothes, when they can plan a budget and utilize their hard earned money properly.
Secondly, most the people judge others based on the outfits that others wear. This forces people to buy good and expensive clothes so that they are not being judged. They feel that expensive clothes or wearing different clothes everyday will make them feel as they are a part of some elevated society. On the other hand, this is not always true. Drawing from my own experience, once in my high school, I was asked if I worked in a hospital as I always wore a gown, which resembled a nurse's gown in the hospital. I felt really embarassed by the situation and went on to buy a whole new closet with loads of clothes, so that I could wear a different dress everyday. After a few days, I scored low in my exams because I was too busy dressing myself with new dresses. I was exhausted by the fact that I have to wear a new look everyday, as people perceived me to dress well.
In conclusion, I would say that people spend too money on their clothing because they want to improve their appearance. As they give much more importance to their physical apperance than their mental being and state. It is better to make people understand that it is not by the looks that one should judge themselves and others. It is by the amount of knowledge they garnered, their skills and talents. Not only that, one's mental state on an everyday basis should be checked upon to know their mood, not the dress they wear that day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...al state. They are always influenced by the people around them. On the present day, social media has p...
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Line 2, column 503, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ons is important and most of the times, ones appearance is judged on basis of that, ...
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Line 2, column 887, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... bought it even though she knew that it wasnt right for her personality. Later, she c...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ve clothes or wearing different clothes everyday will make them feel as they are a part ...
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Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... so that I could wear a different dress everyday. After a few days, I scored low in my e...
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Line 3, column 823, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...the fact that I have to wear a new look everyday, as people perceived me to dress well. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55258126195 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37331651385 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462715105163 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8878744643 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5769230769 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1153846154 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26923076923 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184156987606 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573662531999 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531136783408 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133496468091 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552381084242 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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