Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
There is no shortage of debates, apparance has great influence to our new or current relationships in
our modern society. While some people suggest that it does not have significant role on our
communication due to opinions are more important, others pay huge attention for good-looking and
being well- suited. Personally, I agree with the idea that nowadays people spend too much money for
dressing up. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in my following essay.
To begin with, we have to make plenty new connection in these days than past. To generate better
impression in a person who we meet, we need to looking well. Because at first glance, people may judje
us because of our appearence, and it could change their approach to us. Drawing my own experience,
when I attend to my exam which organizated face to face with professor, he appriciated my clothes due
to dressing formal and professionally. It affect his approach to me which he is very warm and genial.
Additionally, for making better communications in daily life, we need to dress every day well, and it
requires a lot of investment as well.
Secondly, nowadays clothes with higher quality are usually expensive. Even if we buy cheaper clothes,
after short time, they will degenerate and we will have to buy new one. So, it makes shopping these
dresses very costly. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced on
my personal experience. I remember, in the past I did not consider that paying a lot of money for
dressing is unnecessery. However, each time I got disappointed, because they were damaged easily.
Therefore, I had to pay more for higher quality clothes. Furthermore, to relatetd my first opinion if we
need to buy more dress, it also necessitate spending more money for being good- looking. That is why,
improving our appeance is needed more investigation.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I strongly agree with the idea that, in our modern society,
people may obliged to invest more money for looking well by other to impress them and socializing, and
increasing price of clothes due to their quality.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 43, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
... dressing formal and professionally. It affect his approach to me which he is very war...
^^^^^^
Line 19, column 33, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'necessitates'?
Suggestion: necessitates
... if we need to buy more dress, it also necessitate spending more money for being good- loo...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95640326975 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83140751034 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58038147139 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9354333114 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.95 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.53405017921 507% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0888976549997 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289258751194 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413424916496 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0289962689745 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414243205862 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 43, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
... dressing formal and professionally. It affect his approach to me which he is very war...
^^^^^^
Line 19, column 33, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'necessitates'?
Suggestion: necessitates
... if we need to buy more dress, it also necessitate spending more money for being good- loo...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95640326975 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83140751034 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58038147139 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9354333114 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.95 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.53405017921 507% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0888976549997 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289258751194 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413424916496 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0289962689745 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414243205862 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.