People learn things better from those at their own level – such as fellow students or coworkers – than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
I agree with the prompt . I think that people learn things better from their co-workers or fellow students than from those at higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. But some people argue that person from higher level can make things learned easily than the co -workers . They cite the view that the senior ones in the field are better in knowledge to support this view point. However, I strongly disagree to this and will support my view point with two reasons.
First of all, The co- workers or fellow student can understand your mentality and thinking way far better than the senior ones and can understand you at your problem. Such commensurate thinking way of co- worker can understand your problem and can make you clear on the topic easily than the senior ones. Like when i used to study at my school, mostly during my sociology class the thing taught by my teacher used to bounce from my head.So, initially i used to go to the office of my teacher to understand it better. But the way teachers used to explain will be the same and i could not comprehend the meaning. But when i reached back at my dorm, my roommate would easily make me understood the topic which was being difficult during class. Before many years, There sharing between the friends used to be very less and reliability on the teacher or senior supervisors used to be very high. So, during that time they were deprived of learning through the co- workers or students.
Second of all, It would be easier for the students or worker to ask with the co- workers for help rather than to ask for the teacher or supervisor. When i used to work as a accountant in a renowned company, I always hesitated to ask with senior supervisor due to the inferiority complex. And i used to think that asking to senior would raise the question of my ability on my boss's mind. So, Such inferiority complex would be less withe co- worker and it would be easy to ask for help from co-worker and we can also learn it quickly. Had the company's CEO would start to treat their workers with more friendlier way i would have become more frank to ask with the senior supervisor and would have learned better. But most of the company has reverse scenario.
To conclude, whether learning from fellow worker is better than those at higher level is quite complex. As, some have suggested that higher knowledge and experience of the higher lever supervisors can make the things more clear. Nevertheless, I still contend that learning things is better from the fellow students and co- worker of own-level.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.640969163 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39531413741 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436123348018 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4090813487 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.333333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.619047619 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336197033271 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120302073712 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17595749448 0.0737576698707 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279334193119 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166752881467 0.0645574589148 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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