The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument above is well-presented and appears to be relatively sound at first glance.Dr. Karp, states that the in the recent interviews
conducted by him with children living in the group islands that include Tertia and other islands, children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about
other adults of the islands. Because of this, he conlcudes that the Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the
observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well.
First of all, the culture of tertia might have changed in the last 20 years. The people of Tertian might have realised that rearing children on their own is more beneficial than
letting other people to contribute to it. Also people of tertia might be more involved in their professional lives than they were twenty years ago due to which they are not able to
give time to children other than theirs.
In addition the argument fails to clarify the type of questions asked in the interview. Maybe the questions asked in the interview were pertinent to the aspects of life of
the children which were dealt by their bilogical parents and not by other adults. For example, the child's education was taken care by the other adults
while the physical and mental health by the biological parents.
The number of children interviewed might not be enough of a sample space to draw a conclusion on the whole population. The parents of the children interviewed might have preferred to
take care of the their children on their own rather than depending on other people. The argument fails to address this issue which has weakened it significantly
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 280 350
No. of Characters: 1375 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.091 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.911 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Dr
... to be relatively sound at first glance.Dr. Karp, states that the in the recent in...
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Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...states that the in the recent interviews conducted by him with children living in...
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Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bout their biological parents than about other adults of the islands. Because of ...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...age culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studyin...
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Line 6, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ren on their own is more beneficial than letting other people to contribute to it...
^^^
Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...tting other people to contribute to it. Also people of tertia might be more involved...
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Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs ago due to which they are not able to give time to children other than theirs....
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Line 10, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...me to children other than theirs. In addition the argument fails to clarify the type ...
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Line 10, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...were pertinent to the aspects of life of the children which were dealt by their b...
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Line 11, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation was taken care by the other adults while the physical and mental health by ...
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Line 15, column 14, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...d might have preferred to take care of the their children on their own rather than depen...
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Line 15, column 85, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... rather than depending on other people. The argument fails to address this issue wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, talking about, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 280.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05714285714 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66691750521 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510714285714 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1200755918 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.727272727 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 5.70786347227 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 5.15768463074 233% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134073031065 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475335787171 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388114818721 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0487919253513 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291739996394 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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