The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the article argues that the interview centered method that his graduate students are are currently using will establish more accurate understanding about the children-rearing traditions in Tertia and other islands. Authors argument is flawed as it lacks a lot of necessary evidence needed to come to any solid conclusion. Author has used old research as basis for his conclusions from recent studies, ambiguous sample space for research has been used to come to a sweeping conclusion.
To begin with, the author first cites a twenty years old reasearch which used observation-centered method and claims that the results obtained by him by using interview-centered method are contradictory to the results of previous research and thus concludes that any research done by observation-centered method is invalid. But it is quite clear that comparing current research results to a twenty years old research results is inappropriate, especially in those fields of study where subjects of research are constantly changing. It may have happened that during past twenty years the trend of child-rearing has changed in the island, shifted from being village-centred to parent-centered . To come to any solid conclusion the author needs to provide information about recent research done on the child-rearing traditions of Tertia island that has used the observation-centered method. Also even if author wants to use old research as his basis he should provide evidence that no substantial source has influenced the mind-set of the people of the island which has possibly forced them to change their tradition during past twenty years.
Also, in his research author has interviewed children from many islands and not just those from Tertia island alone. On the contrary, the previous research done by Dr. Karp was solely based upon traditions of Tertia island. Hence, it is inappropriate to come to a solid conclusion about Tertia island if the number of children from Tertia island are less among all the children interviewed. Hence author should justify by providing some statistics that the number of tertia children interviewed really are representative of their population among all other students.
Hence, in conclusion author needs to carry out research using both the observation-centered method and interview centered method himself and then finally come to a conclusion as to which method provides much accurate understanding. But, currently, authors argument is flawed and not persuasive.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'on the contrary', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.264563106796 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.177184466019 0.15541462614 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0995145631068 0.0836205057962 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0485436893204 0.0520304965353 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0339805825243 0.0272364105082 125% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133495145631 0.125424944231 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0655339805825 0.0416121511921 157% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.29101056269 2.79052419416 118% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0436893203883 0.026700313972 164% => OK
Particles: 0.00242718446602 0.001811407834 134% => OK
Determiners: 0.0849514563107 0.113004496875 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00970873786408 0.0255425247493 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121359223301 0.0127820249294 95% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2505.0 2731.13054187 92% => OK
No of words: 389.0 446.07635468 87% => OK
Chars per words: 6.43958868895 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424164524422 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.280205655527 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.231362467866 0.208842608468 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133676092545 0.135150697306 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29101056269 2.79052419416 118% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 207.018472906 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462724935733 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 49.0714747569 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 27.7857142857 23.2022227129 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8151399988 57.7814097925 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.928571429 141.986410481 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 23.2022227129 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.07142857143 0.724660767414 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 55.8062798384 51.9672348444 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.78504672897 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258779507453 0.441005458295 59% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.162223174471 0.135418324435 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103455076569 0.0829849096947 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.581431753481 0.58762219726 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134103587231 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127664717516 0.193483328276 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073846332626 0.0970749176394 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360119115759 0.42659136922 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.162490889318 0.0774707102158 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183674610714 0.312017818177 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885027877504 0.0698173142475 127% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on language. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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