The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist."Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rat

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The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.

"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The above statement argues that because of the small fatality risk that the cow flu innoculation poses, it should not be routinely administered. The argument is deceptively attractive because it catters to people's fears of possible death. However, I find the rigor of the argument insufficient as it fails to provide crucial data that can perhaps stengthen or weeken the the decision to ban routine innoculations.

Anyone who has seen TV advertisments for fda approved pharmaceutical drugs will notice that most drugs have an huge list of potentially severe side effects and in some cases even a risk of death. nonetheless, these drugs have been approved by the fda because the benefit they provide outweighs the potential negative effects. For example, chemotherapy, which is a very invasive procedure to cure cancer, poses a high degree of fatality risk. nonetheless, people continue to choose to take it because its benefit outweighs the risk of death. In order for the aforementioned statement to make a logical sense, we need to have statistical data on the possibility of death from innoculations. that would enable us to make a sound judgment on whether the risk is high enough to ban its use.

furthermore, we need to be provided with evidence on what the consequences of not routinely admistering the cow flu innoculations would be. it might be that the fatalities from the lack of innoculations outnumbers the possible fatalities rom the adminstration of the vaccine. In this case, one can make a logical argument that the, eventhough there is a small risk for death from the innocultions, it is even more imperative to provide the ennoculations to prevent more deaths from cow flu. it might be that there are alternatives to innoculations that can perhaps protect people from cow flu with no or a much smaller risk of fatality, and that whomever banned the cow flu innoculations has done so in favor of these alternatives. if this is indeed true, we need a detailed information on these alternative drugs.

In addition, the argument does not specify what 'routinely' exacty means. we need evidence on the number of innoculations needed to sufficiently protect one from cow flu. we need evidence on the frequence of innoculations that exposes one to risk of fatality from the vaccination itself. it maybe that we only need to adminster the innoculation only once in a lifetime, in which case there is no need to routinely adminster the vaccination.

In conclusion, the argument posited in the given statement is weak because it does not provide us with vital evidences that are needed to evaluate the argument. In order to strengthen or weaken the argument, we need data on the number of fatalities from the adminstration of the innoculations, the number of fatalities from cow flu in the absence of innoculations, and if they exist, altenative ways of protecting people from cow flu. furthermore, we need specific information on the maximum number of innoculations need to sucessfully protect one from cow flu and the minimum number of innoculations that expose one to the risk of fatality.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
...ta that can perhaps stengthen or weeken the the decision to ban routine innoculations. ...
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... drugs will notice that most drugs have an huge list of potentially severe side ef...
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..., poses a high degree of fatality risk. nonetheless, people continue to choose to take it b...
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...e, one can make a logical argument that the, eventhough there is a small risk for de...
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...ns to prevent more deaths from cow flu. it might be that there are alternatives to...
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...erhaps protect people from cow flu with no or a much smaller risk of fatality, and...
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...f fatality from the vaccination itself. it maybe that we only need to adminster th...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...ways of protecting people from cow flu. furthermore, we need specific information on the ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2825.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 520.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43269230769 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.63512405443 2.78398813304 166% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 907.2 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1086943606 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.523809524 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7619047619 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 6.88822355289 261% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0322663553499 0.218282227539 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0109571128561 0.0743258471296 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0137761946602 0.0701772020484 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0168912099835 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104845389997 0.0628817314937 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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