The following appeared in an editorial in a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of an editorial recommended that adding a bicycle lane would better solve the traffic jam than widening the highway. However, the evidence he supposed need more careful consideration before adopting a new policy.
To begin with, opponents of widening the highway use the inefficiency of Green Highway to express the solution may not be successful. However, did they really make a survey and calculate how many people would pass the highway during the rush hour? Were there any other factors operative? It’s likely that the two side of area connected by Green Highway are higher-density than that of Blue Highway. Hence, widening the lane might not be the best way for them. However, their failure isn’t highly correlated to Blue Highway since there are so many variables such as the length of rush hour, the total amount of cars driving on the highway, and so on. Opponents should analyze the pros and cons of widening the lane at least according to these data.
On the other hand, opponents suggested that adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway is a good way to the congestion for many area residents are keen bicyclists. What’s the definition of many? Did they make an authorized poll? It’s possible that they indeed made a survey but the interviewees were all in their association, contravening the random sample rule. Even though residents like to ride a bike, it doesn’t mean they’re willing to choose it as a transportation during a commute time. It’s likely that they ride a bicycle as a hobby or an exercise. In addition, there are also other feasible and common policies being enforced like the minimum of passengers. When the rush hour comes, the government can regulate once a car has above three passengers, then the car is able to use a special lane.
To sum up, it still leaves many flaws in the proposition, and it had better dig deeply into the core of the problem. In this way, the solution will be more efficient and practicable.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1580 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.633 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.783 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...to choose it as a transportation during a commute time. It's likely that they ride a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...as a hobby or an exercise. In addition, there are also other feasible and common policies being enfo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, may, really, so, still, then, at least, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 338.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92899408284 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74547923768 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57100591716 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0065381875 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6842105263 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202487379904 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573010337648 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558423177202 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100362753106 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690970160432 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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