In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit from 55 to 45 miles per hour on all county highways. But this effort has failed: the number of accidents has not decreased, and, based on reports by the highway patrol, many drivers are exceeding the speed limit. Prunty County should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths, resurfacing rough highways, and improving visibility at dangerous intersections. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this passage, Prunty County is deciding to imitate the policy Bulter County since there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Bulter County this past year than there were five years ago.
To begin with, we have no way to know that how are the widths of lane and visibility at dangerous intersections before starting to spend money rebuilding them. If there is no problem existing at this aspect, then it’s quite a great loss to tax citizens paid. Next, it’s likely that drivers in Prunty County didn’t receive the complete education about traffics before getting the license. It’s also likely that the government didn’t force those who violated traffic laws to take the certain course to prevent them making the same mistake again. What’s more, they can take serious measures, such as raise the penalty.
On the other hand, implementing Bulter County’s policy is only supported by the data that there were lower percentage reported accidents this past year than there were five years ago. Nevertheless, it used the word “reported”, which weakens the credibility of the report. It’s possible that drivers who bumping others may compensate injured for money ensure they won’t go to the police. When dealt with in private, then those accidents might not be counted as reported accidents. In addition, it’s not strong enough to bolster that the policy is efficient, because the reported accidents contain many kinds. For example, citizens riding bike or motorcycle carelessly hurt the pedestrians is also a kind of accident. Still, we cannot know whether these cases are put into the category in this survey. Hence, it still needs more evidence to evaluate the efficacy of the policy.
To sum up, we should know further and need more concrete evidence to decide whether Prunty County needs to change the original infrastructures they have.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 307 350
No. of Characters: 1505 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.186 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.381 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.459 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[5]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
... of the policy. To sum up, we should know further and need more concrete evidence...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30263157895 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73499906313 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618421052632 0.468620217663 132% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2660859422 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.466666667 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.70786347227 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137705092595 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449323422282 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587303137158 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101047390936 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686613860624 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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