In surveys Mason City rank watersports among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the passage, it assumes that as long as the Mason River is cleaned, and citizens will be willing to participate in water sports. Hence, in order to satisfy and boost citizens’ satisfaction, the city hall should consider allocating budget to riverside leisure facilities. At first glance, it looks reasonable, but it has many flaws after carefully dwelling on.
To begin with, it mentioned that Mason City made a poll that water sports are residents’ favorite recreational activities. Nevertheless, what’s the number of the sample they obtain, and what’s the percentage of the citizens that accounts for the population of the city? In addition, the article supposes that the only reason why residents in city don’t enjoy water sports is river’s water and the river’s smell. However, it doesn’t provide readers with any reliable survey that authorities make to prove that it’s actually the only one of the cause. Consequently, even though the plan indeed successfully improve the quality of the water and the smell disappears soon, it’s not guaranteed that there will be many people being eager to exercise along the riverside.
On the other hand, it assumes that once the government allocates the more percentage of budget to riverside leisure facilities, then it will satisfy the demand for users along the riverside. It’s possible that there truly are more citizens going to exercise, but be cautious that one of the sports they enjoy is fishing. It’s also likely that overfishing may pose part of their lives to the threat. At that time, it needs a huge amount of money to save these creatures. Still, we have no valid evidence to show that facilities will positively improve the using situations for the citizens fond of swimming, boating and fishing.
To sum up, whether Mason City government should spend more money on riverside recreational facilities still leaves multifaceted problems to consider. It had better conduct more surveys and evaluate the pros and cons prudently before making a decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1650 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.591 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.639 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, in addition, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35866261398 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.907450141 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5674589374 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.533333333 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 5.70786347227 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181296255884 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620200671256 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590723941047 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11063142999 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270865283516 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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