The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the memo, a vice president suggest the company should shorten each of shift by one hour to ensure that employees can get adequate amounts of sleep, considered a significant factor of on-the-job accidents.
It assumes that the number of on-the-job accidents in Quiot Manufacturing is above average and it’s in a bad working conditions. However, it’s likely that Panoply Industries plant occurred 10 cases last year, and Quiot had 13 times. Maybe 10 and 13 are both well below the average among all the plants in a nation. On the contrary, it’s common that there are high seasons and low seasons in every occupation, and it also may affect the number. It’s also likely that the city faced the recession, so the shipments were continually low. In this situation, 10 and 13 weren’t rather ideal for it didn’t have many chances of working. Hence, it had better specify the exact number in the memo rather than the percentage.
It use the experts’ research to support its argument, but it’s under the assumption that experts are professional at the field and don’t make any mistakes during the analysis. Nevertheless, we don’t know what the backgrounds of experts are, it’s possible they’re graduated students, designated to analyze by their professors. Once they tend to be idle only want to finish the task rather than pay much attention to it, then it is obvious the result may be inaccurate. In this situation, the company is risk adopting a wrong report even influence its policy profoundly.
It also hypothesizes that the definition of on-the-job accidents is identical when comparing two companies. It’s likely that Quiot regulates every minor and major injuries to the accidents, while Panoply considers injuries such as fracture, being more serious. If the two companies don’t use the same definition, then the number isn’t comparable. On the other hand, the probability of accident occurrence isn’t constant so it’s not a good idea only collecting a period of data.
The vice president proposes that the company should shorten the shift by one hour similar with Panoply. He assumes that employees would all exploit an hour to sleep, rather than exercise or play video games, which may make them more tired. What’s more, it’s also possible that there are some employees living far away from the factory, while employees working in Panoply has their own dorms. Then, they indeed can make a good use of an hour instead of commuting.
To sum up, before deciding to shorten the shift by on hour, it still needs lots of careful considerations.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
argument 4 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 435 350
No. of Characters: 2058 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.567 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.731 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.373 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'condition'?
Suggestion: condition
... average and it's in a bad working conditions. However, it's likely that Panoply...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'uses'?
Suggestion: uses
... memo rather than the percentage. It use the experts' research to support i...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, well, while, such as, on the contrary, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2224824356 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85419281802 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566744730679 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4704693373 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.19047619 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279122676429 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777881309933 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570928279964 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129537156985 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532434715158 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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