The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The memo written by the president of Humana University suggests that they can also to create and actively promote online degree programs like Omni in order to increase their total enrollment and solve the budget problems.
He mentions that the enrollment in online programs increased by 50% last year, indicating the efficiency of the course. What’s the actual enrolled number between two years? It’s likely that last year is 10 and this year is 15, and it’s not convincing to say that the increasing number is a good indication. What’s more, maybe the college had promoted the course by giving a discount, attracting some students to take it. Even though the online course is successful in Omni, it’s not necessarily that doing so will also promote without hitch. Does Humana have the same teachers mastering in the identical field compared with Omni? How’s the average ability of two colleges? If Humana designs and records the similar materials with Omni, once it’s too difficult to its students, it still has little students enrolling.
He says that Omni showed a significant decrease in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space owing to the online course. Nevertheless, how much is a little apartment off the campus and the dorm? It’s possible that students’ priority is saving money, so they would prefer the cheapest way. If the price of renting houses around the campus is cheaper than dorm, then it will be the first choice for them obviously. As a result, the correlation between the online course and cost of dormitory is not high.
He also points out that the cost of maintain buildings has increased along with its budget deficit. Still, what does the percentage of maintaining dorm account for the total expenses of every building? It’s likely that most of the money spent on gym, library and the offices, and little portions of budget is allocated to the dorm. In addition, it’s also possible that their annual performance has gotten worse, so the government withdraw parts of funds from Humana. In this situation, the core problem isn’t whether creating the online course but the finance and the policy.
To sum up, before starting to promote the online course, it had better considerate many problems carefully.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1817 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.871 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: saying
...ear is 15, and it's not convincing to say that the increasing number is a good in...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20698924731 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66984478281 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572580645161 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1724688126 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.85 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312529715209 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865656179091 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076965077761 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148818429393 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110334656654 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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