The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University."Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significa

According to the memorandum, the president worried about the next year's enrollments in that the cost of maitaning buildings has increased along with the budget deficit, with the case practiced by nearby Omni University, the president suggets the online degree programs will handle both of the problems—decreasing enrollments and finacial budget deficit— in Huamana University. While there are some loopholes in the statement, the conslusion si not properly supported by the evidence. We should reexmamine them carefully.

To bgein with, there is no value of reference by the method practiced by Omni University. Although it seemes to work in the Omni that this Universities' online enrollments had increased 50 percent meanwhile the expenditures for dormitory and classroom space was decreasing. While the two Universities can't be share similarities in every factor. Firstly, location. Maybe the Omini University locates far away from the city where there is low population in totall thus they have to try online project to make more progress, while on the other hand, given the possible the the Humana University locates in the city where easy to enroll more students dur to the convienient traffic as the first consideration. Secondly , the scales of the two Universities maybe different with a high possibility.To me, the Omni University may hold much less tutors than Humana, because in this way it could explain why the Omni started online degree program due to lacking of educators.

In addition, the president of Humana Univerisity should make an exhaustive survey of what his is concerning: decreasing enrollments and budget deficit. In that the online program may not help them to get out of the potential troubles. Firstly, there are lots of explanations for less new students in the University. In my opinion, the teaching quality may be not so good as it was, hence the students have other choices. If my conjecture is true, it will be a catastrophy for the University to open online poject, we can conclude it wii be a debacle with the predition that no student want to study online which the courses are provided by such a lower teaching quality University. What's more, given that the financial budget deficit fot the maintanance of Humana University, there may be other troubles besides the lower teaching quality. I suggets the president should find out the problem in the management of the University, maybe the leadership of this college got some problems like bribe or malfeasance. Hence it is not a good time to start the online program right now, before everything is clear.

In conclusion, I fully comprehend this president, as a leader of University. While the online project could not solve the promblem because the plan is not well supported by the evidence. The president should find out where the problems are then to make further decision.

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Average: 5.4 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ough it seemes to work in the Omni that this Universities online enrollments had inc...
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...ory and classroom space was decreasing. While the two Universities cant be share simi...
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Line 3, column 566, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
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...e on the other hand, given the possible the the Humana University locates in the city w...
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...o me, the Omni University may hold much less tutors than Humana, because in this way...
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...ome problems like bribe or malfeasance. Hence it is not a good time to start the onli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2413.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15598290598 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96668873298 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50641025641 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 95.6030334247 57.8364921388 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6315789474 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278177741183 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675477472322 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639654120795 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159048791235 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742516600723 0.0628817314937 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: According to the memorandum, the president worried about the next year's enrollments in that the cost of maitaning buildings has increased along with the budget deficit, with the case practiced by nearby Omni University, the president suggets the online degree programs will handle both of the problems?decreasing enrollments and finacial budget deficit? in Huamana University.
Error: finacial Suggestion: financial
Error: maitaning Suggestion: maintaining
Error: suggets Suggestion: suggest

Sentence: While there are some loopholes in the statement, the conslusion si not properly supported by the evidence.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: si Suggestion: so

Sentence: We should reexmamine them carefully.
Error: reexmamine Suggestion: reexamine

Sentence: To bgein with, there is no value of reference by the method practiced by Omni University.
Error: bgein Suggestion: begin

Sentence: Although it seemes to work in the Omni that this Universities' online enrollments had increased 50 percent meanwhile the expenditures for dormitory and classroom space was decreasing.
Error: seemes Suggestion: seemed

Sentence: Maybe the Omini University locates far away from the city where there is low population in totall thus they have to try online project to make more progress, while on the other hand, given the possible the the Humana University locates in the city where easy to enroll more students dur to the convienient traffic as the first consideration.
Error: convienient Suggestion: convenient
Error: dur Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: totall Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: If my conjecture is true, it will be a catastrophy for the University to open online poject, we can conclude it wii be a debacle with the predition that no student want to study online which the courses are provided by such a lower teaching quality University.
Error: wii Suggestion: wit
Error: poject Suggestion: project
Error: catastrophy Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: predition Suggestion: prediction

Sentence: What's more, given that the financial budget deficit fot the maintanance of Humana University, there may be other troubles besides the lower teaching quality.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: maintanance Suggestion: maintenance
Error: fot Suggestion: fort

Sentence: I suggets the president should find out the problem in the management of the University, maybe the leadership of this college got some problems like bribe or malfeasance.
Error: malfeasance Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: suggets Suggestion: suggest

Sentence: While the online project could not solve the promblem because the plan is not well supported by the evidence.
Error: promblem Suggestion: problem

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2352 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.004 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.754 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.548 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.453 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5