In this memo, the director of the large group of hospitals recommends they should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout their hospital system.To support his suggestion, the author tells us in a lad study of liquid antibactrial han soaps, the solution with UltraClean made 40 percent more redction in the baceria population than their liquid hand soaps in use. After the test of this liquid at their hospital in Workby, the hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection than other hospitals in their group. While this recommendation is problematic, there are some loopholes in this suggestion. We need to reexamine them carefully.
To begin with,the lab study of the liquid soap wih UltraClean is not reliable which need sufficient pracitcal test in the identical place. The point is that the author shows us the practical test in Workby shows the result is better than other hosipals instead of the same place. Thus these two test are all futile as lad test is not well supported by the real test. To support this suggestion, the medical group should take the two tests again.Firstly, the lab study shoud take another group which no liquid soaps in. this is the significance of the contrast group which could show the result more compelling and comprehensive.Secondly, the practical test is equally important so the test should be taken in the same place in all the other hospitals.Because the sanitary conditions varies in different places.Moreover, the reduction of patients' infection cases can not be compared between different hospitals. In order to promote this liquid hand soap, the test should be taken in these hospitals meanwhile they should seperate the regions of contrast groups which still in use of normal hand soap.In this way the two tests will be more convicing rather than the test in Workby.
In addtion,the test of the liquid soap is not convicing due to the goals of the director is preventing serious infections which none of the two test metioned. So the author should define the meaning of serious infection among the all of them.Moreover, whether it is feasible to promote this hand-washing stations in all of the hospitals of the group is in questions, as there are some place can not be sterilized by liquid hand soap even with UltraClean, like the operation rooms, which the hands of doctors's and nureses' are cleaned by alchohl sometimes, so the neccesity of this equipment is not very practical.
In conclusion, the author's recommendation that supply the UltraClean at all the hand-washing stations in their group is not well supported by these evidence in the memo. To support the suggestion, the author should revise both of the lab test and practical tests in hospitals we discussed above.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2265 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.706 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: To
...ations throughout their hospital system.To support his suggestion, the author tell...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , the
...examine them carefully. To begin with,the lab study of the liquid soap wih UltraC...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...her hosipals instead of the same place. Thus these two test are all futile as lad te...
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Suggestion: Firstly
...l group should take the two tests again.Firstly, the lab study shoud take another group...
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Suggestion: Secondly
...esult more compelling and comprehensive.Secondly, the practical test is equally importan...
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Suggestion: Because
...e same place in all the other hospitals.Because the sanitary conditions varies in diffe...
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Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
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...e same place in all the other hospitals.Because the sanitary conditions varies in diffe...
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...y conditions varies in different places.Moreover, the reduction of patients infection ca...
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... which still in use of normal hand soap.In this way the two tests will be more con...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cing rather than the test in Workby. In addtion,the test of the liquid soap is ...
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...r than the test in Workby. In addtion,the test of the liquid soap is not convicin...
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Suggestion: Moreover
...serious infection among the all of them.Moreover, whether it is feasible to promote this...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
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Suggestion: all the
...o promote this hand-washing stations in all of the hospitals of the group is in questions,...
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...t very practical. In conclusion, the authors recommendation that supply the UltraCle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09230769231 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97250289442 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.273113503 57.8364921388 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 165.5 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168875873271 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643902903311 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683906915442 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113243770213 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483675361677 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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