In this memo, the vice president of this food distribution company argues that the Buzzoff would be superior to the Fly-Away, both of witch are pest control companies.
He cites the accedents in both of the warehouses served by the two companies. In Palm city,the food company sufffered over $20,000 worth of food destroyed by the pests in the warehouse withc offered pest service by Fly-Away, while in the Wintervale, there were $10,000 food damage by the pests in the warehouse severed by Buzzoff. Comparing the service price and the lost of the company, the author suggests they should choose the Buzzoff to get back to the Palmcity. But the statement is probelmatic and there are some loopholes in it. We should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, in this statement we should make clear of what is the problems caused by pests in each of the ware house. As lacking of the details of the lost, we could not make the choice that which pest control company would be better. As there are various kinds of damages caused by pests. Some of them feed on the food stored in the warehouse or there are some other kinds of pests which disseminate diseases which could be contagious to human. So it is important for us to make clear of the damage.
In addtion, wihtout the background introduction of the pest control companies we could not evaluate the strategy offered by the vice president. Each company may be specialized in the certain field of their enterprise. While without the evaluation their performance it would be premature to determine the which would be the futture partener. For eaxmple, as the Fly-Away served warehouse suffered more lost, there are other reasons to explain this situation. Maybe the food in this warehouse stored more than that in the Wintervale, or merely expensive.
What's more, the atuhor's evaluation of the two companies by the lost of the warehouses is not convicing. When he offers this advice, the precludes other possiblities and reasons of incurring the damages. For exapmple, may be the Palmcity is the ideal place for the pest to survive while the wintervale, may be so tough or cold that few pests could live long there. So this standard of evaluation would not be feasible to make the strategy.
Finally, whether the Buzzoff pest control company could manage the work in the new place is still in question. Without the comprehensive evalutation, this choice would not be compelling. Maybe the employees in Buzzoff are familiar with the work in Wintervale. The Plam city, however, would be a totally new place for them and even for their family due to the distance between the two places.
In all, the author's advice is not convicing due to the lacking of addtional evidence. As the evidence meitoned in the statement is not compelling, the atuhor should make a wider survey of the cities and the two companies.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: He cites the accedents in both of the warehouses served by the two companies.
Error: accedents Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In Palm city,the food company sufffered over 20,000 worth of food destroyed by the pests in the warehouse withc offered pest service by Fly-Away, while in the Wintervale, there were 10,000 food damage by the pests in the warehouse severed by Buzzoff.
Error: withc Suggestion: witch
Error: sufffered Suggestion: suffered
Sentence: But the statement is probelmatic and there are some loopholes in it.
Error: probelmatic Suggestion: problematic
Sentence: In addtion, wihtout the background introduction of the pest control companies we could not evaluate the strategy offered by the vice president.
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Error: wihtout Suggestion: without
Sentence: Each company may be specialized in the certain field of their enterprise.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While without the evaluation their performance it would be premature to determine the which would be the futture partener.
Error: futture Suggestion: future
Error: partener Suggestion: partner
Sentence: For eaxmple, as the Fly-Away served warehouse suffered more lost, there are other reasons to explain this situation.
Error: eaxmple Suggestion: example
Sentence: What's more, the atuhor's evaluation of the two companies by the lost of the warehouses is not convicing.
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: When he offers this advice, the precludes other possiblities and reasons of incurring the damages.
Error: possiblities Suggestion: possibilities
Sentence: For exapmple, may be the Palmcity is the ideal place for the pest to survive while the wintervale, may be so tough or cold that few pests could live long there.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: exapmple Suggestion: example
Error: wintervale Suggestion: interval
Sentence: Without the comprehensive evalutation, this choice would not be compelling.
Error: evalutation Suggestion: evaluation
Sentence: In all, the author's advice is not convicing due to the lacking of addtional evidence.
Error: addtional Suggestion: additional
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: As the evidence meitoned in the statement is not compelling, the atuhor should make a wider survey of the cities and the two companies.
Error: atuhor Suggestion: author
Error: meitoned Suggestion: mentioned
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2313 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.711 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.885 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.011 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ood distribution company argues that the Buzzoff would be superior to the Fly-Awa...
^^
Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...erved by the two companies. In Palm city,the food company sufffered over 0,000 worth...
^^^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h pest control company would be better. As there are various kinds of damages caus...
^^
Line 6, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the certain field of their enterprise. While without the evaluation their performanc...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...the Wintervale, or merely expensive. Whats more, the atuhors evaluation of the two...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... atuhors evaluation of the two companies by the lost of the warehouses is not con...
^^
Line 12, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... between the two places. In all, the authors advice is not convicing due to the lack...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, may, so, still, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85306122449 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61470228802 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420408163265 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4281881841 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4615384615 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26923076923 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261813756572 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688794373325 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862438313942 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145512168517 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945390810953 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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