It is ture that our life is more efficient with the technolgoy delveopment like the video, computers and the Internet. They all bring lots of covinience to people. While when discussing with the learning knowledge, as my concern, it is a procedure of recognizing oneself, then the others, in the end the society. The people would define the use of the tools metioned above with the conception of their minds. Sutdents' first and most important mission is leanring no matter who they are or how old they are.Thus I contend that I do not agree with the issue that the innovative tools would distract them from real learning.I will address my views as follows.
To begin with, we should get to know the fact that the tools use is up to the people who are using them. Knives could hurt, while they are the essential tools in kitchens in our families. Likeise, the fire could burn a house or waru us, so its usage is totally defined by human beings. As for the inovative tools like the computers, actually I have an ipad pro, my son uses it to watches cartoons like other chilren do while it helps me a lot when I need to look up some materials and discuss with my tutor on my essays. It could make up some functions which the PCs could not handle efficiently. So it is obvious to conclude that the use of these inoovative tools is totally up to you.
In addtion, besides the ipads I metioned above, the innovative tools could help students learn more knowledge quickly. People majoring in geography do not need to go to the valcanos to watch the eruptions in that they could watch them on Videos offered by teachers. Also, like students majoring in Mechanical Engineering, they use to design and draw gears of machines on papers. After the invetion of AutoCAD, they can desgin these gears in Computers and do not need to worry about the flaws in the design as they could easily erase them with several clicks when the erroes are found. So people should embarce the technological development rahter than aoviding it as the more open we are in mind, the more we could gain. If the pope accepted copenicus's heliocentric thoery, of course this is another story and the astronomy would be another story which may be more advanced at present. In that the issue of the use of innovative tools reflects the people's conservative minds of being worried about the uncerainty.
Finally, as the issue metions the innovative tools would distract people's attetion. Of course if I do not take care of my son who uses my ipad, he may watch it for a whole day. Thus the third point I want to address is that as a student, you should know the study is the most significant mission. So we can see many students play computer games for days and nights, while it could not represent all of them. As more student know the impotance of studying as I mentioned. Especially in China, as there are so many students in each level of education, the whole society is focusing on the education. Instead of worring the bad consequnce of these tools may bring to the students, the first mission we should take is to regulate the conception of the student's attitude on studying.
In all, I belive every coin has two sides, also there are so many use of kinves and fire. Thus I think the innovative tools would not distract the student's attetions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, finally, first, if, look, may, so, then, third, thus, while, as for, i think, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2725.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 595.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57983193277 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49472800523 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468907563025 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 857.7 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5937499862 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.925925926 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.037037037 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7037037037 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107628686448 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306025992539 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.024556212288 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0645961331335 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107087205409 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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