We are living in a world with rapid development which seems to make us ignore what is happening presently as well as who are making great efforts to the human being's future. When we venerate the passed celebrities in every field of our society in history, there are some people who are contributing to us in the fields they are professional with. So I fundamentally disagree with the essay that we are living in an age of no heroes because of the comprehensive media information.
Firstly and foremost, I should make this essay clear that why the heroes are absent in the flood of media that we are likely to overlook them as a hero. This is interesting because we should discuss the media and heroes apart while together. As I put them apart, in that due to the development of our media fields especially the bombing prosperity of the Moblie Internet Technology, people, as human nature, feel like to focus on what they are like. For example, in front of a person's individual mobile devices, he is the master of the device like cellphones. So he would like to see what attract him mostly while the ignorance of other fields emerges. Not only the heroes but also other information not important to certain individuals. If you do not watch the Beijing Opera, for example, you would not know what it plays, because they are so unfamiliar with the people who do not interested in it, or in other words, maybe it's the first time to him heard of the words. It's a lonely age we are living in because we even do not know what is the man by our side can do before he shares some video clips on the Internet which amazing the world by his appearances like singing or dancing, for example. On the other hand, we should talk about heroes. There are various kinds of heroes, in the screen, on the stage, in the scientific area, also in daily life. So Captain Americas and Einsteins would explain some of the stories, while in our life, heroes also help people in many fields. To me, I believe the policemen who fight for the criminals are heroes, the Einsteins seem to be too far away from us, while without the protections of these policemen, who may be also someone's husband or son, we could not live in a peaceful community. In this point, they are heroes to all of us.
As I put them together, it is easy to comprehend after our discussion of the thriving Moblie Internet. Indeed, there are heroes in our world now like policemen. While it is because they are so common as if they are like air by our side, we even could not feel their strong existence. By this way, we can find out our limitation shaped by the Media, which need to be reconsidered carefully. Thus, this view also explains why the heroes in history are mostly remembered clearly, in this view, that is because of the lacking of Media reports which made them celebrated.
In conclusion, the heroes are not only existed in the past, but they are also living in the present no matter how huge or small contributions they make, if we set up a suitable perception, they are everywhere.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 926, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...erested in it, or in other words, maybe its the first time to him heard of the word...
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Line 3, column 972, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...e first time to him heard of the words. Its a lonely age we are living in because w...
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Line 3, column 1404, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...in Americas and Einsteins would explain some of the stories, while in our life, heroes also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 33.0505617978 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51717902351 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52732387522 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466546112116 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9768722643 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.545454545 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1363636364 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183676597415 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579334003162 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046767166162 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113190737638 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400243780035 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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