Actually, I don’t agree with the statement that the government does no help on important problems in people’s daily life. The government can help the citizens not only on their health problems, but also on their career development.
Firstly, the government can take care of us from health care aspects. As citizens, from the first day we born into the society, it is inevitable that we will suffer from some diseases, which may cost a lot if we choose to pay the whole bill by ourselves our families. However, with the help of the government, we can take advantage of the health insurance to cover most of the payment and release the burden of our families. For example, there are many undeveloped countries that the government wouldn’t provide health insurance to their residents, which makes it difficult for the sick to support by their own family, even some of them have to borrow money from the banks or high risky loan companies. Therefore, it is beneficial that if we can turn to help for the government which has this type of health insurance policies.
Secondly, the government can also do good to the career development of individuals, the government would like to make ambitious plans for building fundamental infrastructures, such as high-speed railways and high-tech industrial parks, which need a lot of employees, therefore it makes tremendous opportunities for those who are searching for job positions. If one wouldn’t like to size the chances that the government offered, they might fall behind on their career development due to the stale concept that they would rather ask for their families than take the offers from governments.
In summary, governments can help people on some important problems such as health insurance and career development, it is unrealistic for us to rely on ourselves or families for solving all crucial problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
Suggestion: bore
...cts. As citizens, from the first day we born into the society, it is inevitable that...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... this type of health insurance policies. Secondly, the government can also do goo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...than take the offers from governments. In summary, governments can help people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, even so, for example, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35666666667 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31909458872 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.980002512 48.9658058833 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 178.555555556 100.406767564 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3333333333 20.6045352989 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.3333333333 5.45110844103 263% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365710036788 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1669271061 0.076458572812 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079463250155 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243296178362 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125765327603 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 11.7677419355 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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