The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
n my opinion, most of the time, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation according to the following examples.
Take Steve Job's company, Apple, for example. Its success evidently lies in not only the comprehensive working system but the brilliant design, attracting tons of consumers all around the world. Without a sense of cooperation, suggesting that it can only rely on the outstanding hardware, the product made by Apple may not become a leading nowadays as it's just the same with other brands, not emphasizing the appearance and aesthetics of the product. However, Steve Job totally shows the cooperation in his leadership, respecting all the departments' professions and providing them with a good communicating platform in the company. Hence, users or people in this era are the witness to Apple's unprecedented success.
Take one of the teams in basketball leagues in Taiwan, TaiPi, for instance. The supervisors spent lots of money to hire many excellent players in the off-season, wishing to win the champion trophy for the next season. However, these good players were all eager to be a cynosure and take a lead in games, so it turned out that they failed to get the champion back in the season even though the team had the top players. Hence, whether all people have a sense of a cooperation matters a lot.
Take the recent trade war between China and U.S for another examples. Two robust countries both want to become the biggest country in the world, so one side decides to betray the other by imposing astonishingly high tariff. In this way, they start the endless competition through increasing the tariff constantly, since the cooperation ends. However, people around the world can all observe that competition in the international trade isn't beneficial to each side. As the simple concept shows, even one country is better than another in producing two different goods, it's sill conducive to import one of the goods after the comparison. The result is obvious that as China and U.S tries to become the strongest country through contravening the contract, actually they both do damage to each other.
From the above-mentioned examples, I'd say the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in most of the fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99755501222 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85436799 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545232273839 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0482765366 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.235294118 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265775410212 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823153950226 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125321222474 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210384059564 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172850714594 0.0667264976115 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.