The following appeared in an editorial in a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the editorial from local newspaper, it has been stated that the opponents of motorist's lobby plan to add another lane to blue highway advocated that bicycle lane can be constructed to ease highway traffic issues. Opponent concluded this based on the issue faced by green highway as well as the interest of local people. However, before this recommendation can be evaluated, three question must be answered.
First of all, are green and blue highway comparable ? Circumstances for one can be used for generalization for another?
It is possible green and blue highway are not same at all - perhaps green highway run through residential , where blue is located in rural unpopulated area. thus there is possibility that quality of highway is different with green falling apart and blue in pristine condition. If either of this has merit ,then conclusion in original is weaken.
Secondly, do majority of area resident interest in biking live within biking distance from their employment? Opponent prematurely assumed that many of residential in town will take bike to work in morning than driving their cars. If the working distance from home is more than 15 miles, will it be ideal to choose to bike to work, maybe not , it will take much of their time and energy to reach their destination. This seems unfeasible. If above is true, then argument holds no water.
Thirdly, are this added bicycle lane safe? Any accident in this lane doesn't hamper the traffic? It is assumed that constructing blue lane reduces rush hour traffic, but the traffic jam that results through accident in blue lane is not mentioned. Adding a bicycle lane near a main highway is risky, it can cause disastrous accident which ultimately result in more traffic rush .If this is true , then the argument seems flawed.
In conclusion: the argument , as it stands now, is considerably flaw due to several unwarranted assumption. If author is able to answer above these question and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to test viability of proposed recommendation to add a bike lane to blue highway.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1683 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.634 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.738 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ps green highway run through residential , where blue is located in rural unpopul...
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Line 4, column 114, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... highway run through residential , where blue is located in rural unpopulated are...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...e is located in rural unpopulated area. thus there is possibility that quality of hi...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...e is located in rural unpopulated area. thus there is possibility that quality of hi...
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Suggestion: ,
...e condition. If either of this has merit ,then conclusion in original is weaken. ...
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Line 4, column 338, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
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Suggestion: ,
...eal to choose to bike to work, maybe not , it will take much of their time and ene...
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Line 8, column 70, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...le lane safe? Any accident in this lane doesnt hamper the traffic? It is assumed that ...
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Line 8, column 376, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...h ultimately result in more traffic rush .If this is true , then the argument seem...
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Suggestion: If
...ultimately result in more traffic rush .If this is true , then the argument seems ...
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Suggestion: ,
...lt in more traffic rush .If this is true , then the argument seems flawed. In c...
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Suggestion: ,
...s flawed. In conclusion: the argument , as it stands now, is considerably flaw ...
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Line 10, column 65, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'flawed'.
Suggestion: flawed
...ent , as it stands now, is considerably flaw due to several unwarranted assumption. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, then, third, thirdly, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0144092219 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7304608664 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553314121037 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.9150943733 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5789473684 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150112168815 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441825671434 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464420757095 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0740641286518 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304520262061 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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