1. "Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
The above lines state that the commuters have been complaining that the increased rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase. Before analyzing the above argument, certain questions have to be answered.
Firstly, will widening the highway reduce the rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city similar to that of Green Highway? The commuters had already complained that due to the increasing traffic, the daily commute time for the people has been doubled. Proper evidence such as surveys and statistics have to be gathered along with the dimensions of the highway before construction of an additioal lane. Only then the propasal favouring the addition of an extra lane to the already existing highway might hold firm else there is a high chance that the traffic might even get worse on a whole. Since the above claim is quite vague with no proper supporting evidence, the primary conclusion in the above argument is gradually weakened.
Secondly, is it true that the last year's construction of an addtional lane to the Green Highway has worsened the traffic condition? The author states that it has rather worsened than improve the traffic on construction of an extra lane on Green Highway and supports his claim without any evidence such as facts and surveys. A question has to be raised about the analogy between the Blue Highway and Green Highway before coming to conclusion and must be taken further accordingly. Due to lack of such evidence such as statistics and surveys, the aboe argument does not hold firm.
Thirdly, the author argues of adding a bicycle lane to the highway with an intention to curb the rush hour traffic. There has been no proper evidence supporting the fact that the people in the area are keen bicyclists. Morever there might a large chunk of people who might travel to work at farther places where bicycling might not be an option for them and the only way they can commute is using the normal transportation such as cars and buses. In such cases the construction of a bicycle lane would prove to be futile and might not hold the author's claim. Morever there might be a case where the cyclists might cause much traffic than reducing it which can inturn lead to a large traffic conjestion on the Blue Highway. As the author fails to provide further evidence such as statistics to support his claim, the above argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, due to a paucity of evidence such as surveys and numbers, the author's claim might not be right and the above argument presented by him does not stand firm.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2523 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.44 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.087 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.874 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
...otorists lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last years addition of ...
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Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...an additional lane of traffic. But last years addition of a lane to the nearby Green ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'widen'
Suggestion: widen
...ns have to be answered. Firstly, will widening the highway reduce the rush-hour traffi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...d. Secondly, is it true that the last years construction of an addtional lane to th...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the traffic condition? The author states that it has rather worsened than improve...
^^
Line 7, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on such as cars and buses. In such cases the construction of a bicycle lane would...
^^
Line 7, column 585, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... authors claim. Morever there might be a case where the cyclists might cause much...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86064030132 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50264984885 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423728813559 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 795.6 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2396933096 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.217391304 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0869565217 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399025598761 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133581008854 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154036503992 0.0701772020484 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237888636596 0.128457276422 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190096807165 0.0628817314937 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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