"The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only one-half that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
The above lines state that the birtrate in the city of calatrava has been decreasing over a period of 5 years. having said that the committee is looking forward to plan a ten year budget for the city of calatrava. The commitee plans of reducing the funds budgeted for education during the decade as they assume that due to a decreased birthrate, the number of students who are abou to enroll in the city's public schools might decrease. The commitee has also been planning to resuce the funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities at the same time due to the above concern. So as result, they plan of ending up with a sufficient amount of money which might fund city facilities and programs used by adults, since they are expecting a rise in the adult population over the due course.
Before we can further analyze the above argument, three questions have to answered to justify the above assumptions made by the author. Firstly, has there been any legit surveys and statistics that support that there has been a plunge in the birthrate over the past few years. The author's argument has provided us with vague details and hypothesis stating that there has been a plummet in birthrate but failed to support such allegations with proper numbers, which might mostly include surveys and statistics over the past given course of time.
Secondly, due to a decreased birthrate the author assumes that there might be a decrease in the number of students getting enrolled in the public schools in the city. there has been no specific proof which supports the claim made by the author stating that the enrollment of students into the public schools might decrease over a due course of time and it would be completely vague to to conmsider this above assumption legit thereby cutting the funds for the public schools acrros the city. since there has been no clear details above the number of students enrolling over a period of time, the reduced birthrate might not hold an important factor for the commitee to cut funds hence the above argument made by the author does not hold water.
Thirdly, the author expects a rise in the adult population over the next few years and tries to create a cause and effect relationship between the bithrate and the adult population. there has clearly not been any numbers and statistics that might support the above claim stating that adult population might increase over a period which the author hypothesizes in order to fund a sufficient amount of money to the city's facilities and programs used by the adults.
In conclusion, since the author's above argument blatantly disregards the facts that might be considered legit and fails to support the above claims made by him without supporting evidence such as surveys and statistics the above argument can be considered vague and flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 110 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2331 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.409 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.467 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.708 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Having
...en decreasing over a period of 5 years. having said that the committee is looking forw...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to planning'.
Suggestion: to planning
...d that the committee is looking forward to plan a ten year budget for the city of calat...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...eased birthrate, the number of students who are abou to enroll in the citys public scho...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 605, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ame time due to the above concern. So as result, they plan of ending up with a su...
^^
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... birthrate over the past few years. The authors argument has provided us with vague det...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...lled in the public schools in the city. there has been no specific proof which suppor...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 383, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...f time and it would be completely vague to to conmsider this above assumption legit t...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 493, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...for the public schools acrros the city. since there has been no clear details above t...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 577, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...the number of students enrolling over a period of time, the reduced birthrate might not hold a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... the bithrate and the adult population. there has clearly not been any numbers and st...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90702479339 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46762643305 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419421487603 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1838780467 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.642857143 119.503703932 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5714285714 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153109574279 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699627783936 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563025093154 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08659204044 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562456317554 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.3799401198 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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