The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
“Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora’s citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora’s citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year’s unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
It might seem logical at first to believe that a lower level of physical fitness is directly related to the predominantly heavy usage of computers, however the passage states that , the above mentioned reasoning is incorrect and lays out various facts and statements that show that why is the fitness level of the citizens residing in Corpora is very low. The passage makes some assumptions in order to state and prove it's point of view. We need to analyze and make our findings against these assumptions.
The first major assumption is that how has the mindset of the people across the span of 20 years changed. The methods and standards of physical fitness evaluation have drastically changed over the span of 20 years. The current generation is more focused on fitness that the generation 20 years ago.This can be due to a gradual rise in the awareness that has been brought about by their current health minister who happens to be a former Olympian. Hence it is illogical to have a fair and impartial comparison amongs't the two of them.
Secondly, the claim is made that continuous usage of computers affects the physical evaluation score. This is refuted by stating that some of the fittest individuals in Corpora, belong to the regions where there has been a heavy usage of computers. The major flaw in this assumption is that it is not mentioned anywhere that those whose use computers for long durations, what is their physical fitness. Someone may be both fit and also uses the computer regularly, whereas it too broad a claim made in the passage. Not every citizen may fall into the above category and hence this assumption is severely faulted.
Lastly, the author attributes a lower physical fitness score to the purchasing power of the citizens of Corpora due to a recent decline in the economy. He states that due to decline in the money spent on fitness related equipment and services, the overall fitness score has reduced. But does everyone need the services and use of special equipment for keeping oneself fit. Most probably, even in the absence of money spent, the citizens of Corpora will find alternate methods to keep themselves fit.
Hence we need to address these assumptions and logical flaws that have appeared in the recent health magazine. By doing these we can ensure a higher fitness score and evaluation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1905 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.468 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...mputers, however the passage states that , the above mentioned reasoning is incorr...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at show that why is the fitness level of the citizens residing in Corpora is very...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ally changed over the span of 20 years. The current generation is more focused on f...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...itness that the generation 20 years ago.This can be due to a gradual rise in the awa...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...er who happens to be a former Olympian. Hence it is illogical to have a fair and impa...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...nate methods to keep themselves fit. Hence we need to address these assumptions an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89698492462 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56268084626 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510050251256 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7667073464 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.277777778 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195679416771 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055385007263 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490998854949 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989481574973 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442211866611 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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