The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve This sanctuary is essent

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The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:

“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The article appears in a petition sent to the residents of Youngtown region. It is stated that some authorities are willing to sell some land to Smith Corporation. They feel that by doing this the region surrounding Youngtown Wildlife Reserves which is home to 300 bird species will be affected drastically. The argument has some unstated assumptions and irregularities in them which we need to justify and prove their credibility.

The first assumption that is made by the residents is that by allowing the construction of a small hotel in the wildlife preserves, it will dampen the natural environment. But it fails to take into account that Smith Corporation is famous for constructing environmentally friendly and sustainable lodges and hotels. If they are renonwed for their success in this particular field of constructing, then they will surely keep up to their reputation and build and eco-friendly resort. Th residents fail to take this factor into consideration while filing the petition.

Another major fear that resides in the residents of Youngtown is that Smith Corporation will initially build the hotel in the land allocated to them, but in the near future they may use their power and influence and stake claim over the entire wildlife preserve.Even though Smith Corporation has promised to no do any harm to the sanctuary the residents feel they can't be trusted.To avoid this the residents should form a legal agreement with the corporation to safeguard their interests. Also the area and location of the hotel is not mentioned anywhere in the petition. If Smith Corporation selects the area to construct the hotel at the outskirts or at the boundary of the sanctuary then it is as good as the hotel neighbouring the Wildlife Preserve. Thus it won't cause any significant damage as expected or predicted by the residents of Youngtown.

On the flip side if the construction of a small hotel acts as an impetus, towards the development of the lifestyle and economic condition of the local residents. Such a motive may favour both the parties in the argument. Increase in tourism will enhance the socio-economic development of the region, give rise to more employment opportunities and can completely change the landscape of the region forever.

Thus with the help of the above claims and proof against the validity of the assumptions, we can conclusively state that the argument made above is incorrect. The residents need to first consider the possible ramifications of the claims they are making. As the way it stands the argument is illogical and even if a single one of these assumptions or claims is proved false, then the plausibility and structure of the argument is weakened.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09213483146 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02929350076 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.9344909013 57.8364921388 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.888888889 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23101293324 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671503330199 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753700494893 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111974285775 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800688943308 0.0628817314937 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2228 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.973 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.927 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.666 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5