In the letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette, the writer stated that if the town council of Balmer island reduces the number of mopeds rented by island’s mopeds rental companies by 50 percent, then the town council will able to reduce the island’s total number of accidents, involving mopeds and pedestrians, also by 50 percent from its original value. The writer has come to this conclusion based on the support that a success was achieved by Seavile’s town council, a neighboring island, when enforced similar restrictions on mopeds rentals. However, before this recommendation be properly assessed, these below questions must be answered.
First of all, are the populations increment of Balmer island and Seavile’s island are roughly comparable during the summer season? In other words, can circumstances from one island be used to make generalizations and predictions about the other? It is possible that populations of Balmer and Seavile’s populations during the summer are not congruent at all- perhaps Seavile’s populations remain same, whereas, Balmer population increases to 100 thousand during the summer. Further, there is a possibility that the population of the Seavile’s island decreases by a great number from its actual value during the summer month and hence make it easier for the Seavile’s town council to limit the number of accidents. If either of these scenarios has merit, then prediction drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, are there similar number of roads available in these two islands? The writer of the argument prematurely assumes that by only limiting the mopeds number simply reduce the number of accidents in the Balmer island. However, this not might be the case. Because, it is possible that Seavile’s island has a greater number of roads than the Balmer island. So, it is easy to assume that reduction of mopeds number maybe performs as a catalyst for Seavile’s island while same procedure does not necessarily work for another island. In an ideal world, one can predict anything he or she wants, but in the reality, it is mandatory to show precise evidence in order to make one’s claim justifiable. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold on water.
Moreover, it is possible that Seavile’s town council add some additional restrictions for pedestrians’ movements what makes it favorable to lower the total number of accidents of Seavile’s island. Furthermore, if there are a smaller number of mopeds in Savile island than the Balmer island then of course, the two scenarios are not same at all. Because, it is possible that even after limiting the values of mopeds number by exactly 50 percent from the earlier value, maybe still there are huge number of mopeds in the Balmer island. And if it is true then it will surely undermine the writers claim in the given argument.
In conclusion, the argument, as it is stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the writer of this argument is able to answer the above questions and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a more systematic research style), the it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to limit the number of mopeds rented by the rental companies of Balmer island.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2710 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.954 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 222 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.432 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.386 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...’s island are roughly comparable during the summer season? In other words, can circumstances from...
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Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'circumstance'
Suggestion: circumstance
... the summer season? In other words, can circumstances from one island be used to make general...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d. However, this not might be the case. Because, it is possible that Seavile’s island h...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...rm of a more systematic research style, the it will be possible to fully evaluate the ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, whereas, while, in conclusion, of course, first of all, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12248628885 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83780315459 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429616087751 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 885.6 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.8683440479 57.8364921388 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.428571429 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0476190476 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.70786347227 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375450985313 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118044509965 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107938344434 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223670556583 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633194739191 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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