It is argued that, in order to ensure the fair prices for consumers, the Batavia government should begin regulate retaill mile prices. By the evidence that the number of the local diary farms has increase 25 percent greater thatn 10 years ago while the local mile price has doubled surprisingly. While thie statement is problematic, because more evidence are required to support the suggetion by the author. The evidence in this letter also has some loopholes, so we need to reexamine them carefully.
To begin with, the atuhor does not tell us the specific conditions of these diary farms. Firstly, the increasing number of the farms is vague as we can not see the accurate statistics. GIven there is an 25 percent increasing, maybe where was 20 farms in this city now it's 25 while this supply of milk is far less compare to the purveying the local market even Bativaia need import milk outside due to the scale of the large city possibly. Secondly, likewise where these mile selling to is another important case foe us to analyze the demands and supplies locally. Maybe the local milk is good enough to be the material of cheese instead of dringking, so the local price's increasing is possible as the mile supply is really sufficient. In this case , the author should find out the origin place of the milk in the markets besides the only one-Excello Food Market which maybe favored by the rich residents.
In addtion, there is another important time the author does not offer to us. Given to the fluctuation and inflation of the economy ,it is possible for the price of the mile fluctuating in a normal range as they are daily consumptions, the inflation likewise may also attribute to the increasing price of the milk. So we should know how long does it take for the price of the mile increased from $1.50 to ove $ 3.00 per gallon. If it takes a short time, we may consider maybe the local diary farmer had some troubles as the cows got sick or the price of the grazing food for cow was increasing dramatically. If the time takes long, it is highly possible related to the inlflation of the price in totall. So the author should instigate the price of some daily comodities lile eggs,bacons,vegetables to find out whether the inflation afftced the local market.
Finally, it is hasty to regulate the retail milk prices. Beside the evidence from one local marker is not sufficeint, the Government should not make decision before the they really find out the reason of the increasing price. From the side of the diary farmers, they would be affected directly if the authority regulates the price, maybe they will offer less milk than before even turn to the diary business to other places to gain more profits. From the side of the consumers, maybe they can gain the benefit from the government temporarily, while in the future they may not meet the milk from local farms even they could ruin the local diary farms by the regulation from th government.
In all, it would not be feasible to regulate the price of the milk by local government before theauthority and the author making everything clear.As their evidence is not compelling, more evidence are required as we disscussed above. So this unconvincing letter should be studied again. Firstly , the author should make a wide survey in local markets.Secondly he should find out the increasing is for temporary or gradual.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 589 350
No. of Characters: 2735 1500
No. of Different Words: 258 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.926 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.643 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.403 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.609 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.749 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.87 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the author. The evidence in this letter also has some loopholes, so we need to r...
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Line 3, column 622, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ilk is good enough to be the material of cheese instead of dringking, so the loca...
^^
Line 3, column 749, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...upply is really sufficient. In this case , the author should find out the origin p...
^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...fluctuation and inflation of the economy ,it is possible for the price of the mile...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$3'.
Suggestion: $3
...e of the mile increased from .50 to ove $ 3.00 per gallon. If it takes a short time...
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Line 5, column 777, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , bacons
...price of some daily comodities lile eggs,bacons,vegetables to find out whether the infl...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
...ernment should not make decision before the they really find out the reason of the incre...
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Line 7, column 519, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...maybe they can gain the benefit from the government temporarily, while in the fut...
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Line 7, column 654, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...they could ruin the local diary farms by the regulation from th government. In...
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Line 9, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l government before theauthority and the author making everything clear.As their ...
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Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...and the author making everything clear.As their evidence is not compelling, more ...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... letter should be studied again. Firstly , the author should make a wide survey in...
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Line 9, column 353, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
...uld make a wide survey in local markets.Secondly he should find out the increasing is fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78974358974 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64080108082 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441025641026 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 889.2 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5210245455 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.826086957 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4347826087 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0917547752298 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030421275677 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440386793204 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.060269853358 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477793505827 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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