The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author contends that the governments of the Batavia decide to control the profit of the dairy farmers by regulating and offering a fair price for selling milk. To support, reasons that the producing of the milk increase in comparison to the 10 years ago and the price of the milk increase from 1.5$ to 3$. I find this argument logically unconvincing because it rests on the number of vital questions are to be answered.
The first problem of the argument is that the author unfairly assumes that the increase in the price of the milk has the correlation with increasing the profit of the dairy farmers. The correlation alone amounts to scant evidence of the claimed cause and effects relationship. It is entirely possible the author overlooks some factors that might absent is this specific case but present in all others. In addition, it raises the question that did any process in producing milk increase the price? Because it is entirely possible that the producing material of the milk package become rare, therefore, the price of milk package and plastic increase. Hence, without ruling these possibilities the author cannot convince me that increasing milk price has the correlation with increasing the dairy farmer profit.
The second problem of the recommendation is that the author relies on the vague and unclear evidence of report by mentioning that the number of dairy farmer become greater by 25percent, however, the author did not mention that how many farmers take part in this specific report. As you know, the greater the number of participants, the more valid and reliable the findings are. Therefore, the author does not answer the question that what was the former number of farmers and the exact total number of the farmers now? Or how many former took part in research? Because it is entirely possible that the number of farmers who took part was not significant. In addition, even if assumes that the number of the farmer who took part in this reports was enough, the author did not indicate sufficient evidence to represent the sample are representative of the sample society. In a research, the findings can be generalized to the concerned population when the samples are representative of the target society in terms of age, gender, income, social class and so forth. Hence, the author has to answer the questions that are all the farmers have been in this job for many years or they are the beginner? Or do all the farmers who take part in this report have the same gender or age? Because it is entirely possible that the number of dairy farmer increase but they do not have much experience in this field, therefore, they cannot increase the profit and produce of the dairy.
Finally, the author unfairly overlooks the fact that the thing changes over the 10 years. However, the author assumes that everything remains unchanged for the 10 years. It is entirely possible that because the population of the country increase in these 10 years the governments have to import some of the diary good from other countries, therefore, the price of the milk increase. To strengthen, the author has to provide more evidence to prove his claim.
In sum, according to all above mentioned, to convince me, the author has to answer the mentioned questions and provide more firm and solid evidence to prove his claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 567 350
No. of Characters: 2710 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.88 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.78 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.508 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.237 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$5'.
Suggestion: $5
...d the price of the milk increase from 1.5$ to 3$. I find this argument logically u...
^^
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$3'.
Suggestion: $3
...price of the milk increase from 1.5$ to 3$. I find this argument logically unconvi...
^^
Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun former seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much former', 'a good deal of former'.
Suggestion: much former; a good deal of former
...total number of the farmers now? Or how many former took part in research? Because it is en...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... how many former took part in research? Because it is entirely possible that the number...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 732, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e number of the farmer who took part in this reports was enough, the author did not ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...10 years the governments have to import some of the diary good from other countries, theref...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, then, therefore, as to, in addition, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2781.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 567.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90476190476 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58159854462 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.379188712522 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.764838172 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.875 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121418677299 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03942371166 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320449001224 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0635451474749 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490312419849 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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