The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper Commuters complain that increased rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time The favored proposal of the motorists lobby

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.

"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The following argument is flawed for numberous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted assumptions that many residents using the blue highway really enjoy bicycling and creating a bicycle lane to blue highway would exhort the resident to start using bicycles as a means of transportation which in turn reduces the traffic on blue highway, rendering its main conclusion that adding a bicycle lane to the blue highway to help alleviate highway traffic issues instead of creating another lane on the to blue highway invalid. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.

The argument fails to provide any justification that addition of a lane on Green Highway still brings about a worsened traffic jam, the traffic jam was stated to have happened last year. For one, it could be that a minor or ghastly accident occured on the the days they recorded high traffic jams on the Green Highway which would have prevented commuters from moving freely. Perhaps the Green Highway could run through
residential neighborhoods, or populated environments where commuters have to be careful moving on the Green highway so as to prevent ramming into someone or something. Had the argumeent provided information
regarding the rate at which the worsened traffic still occurs, if it still occurs till date, or where the Green Highway is located, either in a residential or highly populated or less dense area, it would have been easy to concede that adding a bicycle lane to the Blue highway would be more beneficial to alleviate the high traffic jam on Blue highway rather than the intended additional lane.

The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions such as how safe would the added bicycle lane on the
Blue Highway be? Would it be accident free? The opponent in the argument prematurely assumes that when an bicylcle lane is being added to the Blue Highway, it reduces the high traffic jam in the Blue Highway without considering the the accident rate, the rate at moving cars ram into themselves on the Blue Highway or the
way moving vehicles ram would ram into the added bicycle lane which leads to an uneasy flow of vehicles or bicycles on the Blue Highway. Had the argument provided information regarding the safety of the Blue Highway and the added bicycle lane, stating how the added railway is being constructed that prevents moving cars and bicycles from ramming into themselves, it would bolster the claim that adding a bicycle lane to the Blue Highway would help ease the high traffic jam on the Blue Highway.

Finally, the argument claims without warrant that because many area resident enjoy bicycling, the invention of a bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles as a means of transportation and also readuce the amount of vehicles on the Blue Highway that causes high traffic jam. The argument is still lacking because it fails to provide any information about the residents proximity to their place of work. Information was not provided regarding how close the residents place of work is close to the Blue Highway and to their shelter. It would be very straineous for someone to bicycle a journey he could do in 20 minutes with his
vehicle, he turns out be completing the journey for one hour. On getting to the work place, one would be very tired and might be irritating people as a result of sweat coming out of the body or might just be completely drenched in rain while bicycling to the place of work. The argument needs to provide information
about the residents proximity to their place to support the claim that the resident would switch to bicycle because of their profound love for bicycle.

Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convicing case that adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway would reduce the high traffic jam and also exhort people to start using bicycles to commute because of their love for bicycles. If the author is able to answer the th

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... a minor or ghastly accident occured on the the days they recorded high traffic jams on...
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... a minor or ghastly accident occured on the the days they recorded high traffic jams on...
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...haps the Green Highway could run through residential neighborhoods, or populated ...
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... be careful moving on the Green highway so as to prevent ramming into someone or somethi...
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...ther than the intended additional lane. The argument also leaves many other unan...
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... argument prematurely assumes that when an bicylcle lane is being added to the Blu...
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...in the Blue Highway without considering the the accident rate, the rate at moving cars ...
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...to themselves on the Blue Highway or the way moving vehicles ram would ram into t...
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...urney he could do in 20 minutes with his vehicle, he turns out be completing the ...
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...ute because of their love for bicycles. If the author is able to answer the th
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 55.5748502994 160% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3344.0 2260.96107784 148% => OK
No of words: 675.0 441.139720559 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95407407407 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09713273454 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57677460259 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.379259259259 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1038.6 705.55239521 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.091614852 57.8364921388 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.0 119.503703932 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5263157895 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 5.15768463074 213% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139453690927 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054547366033 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390820057345 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728013711792 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386926971612 0.0628817314937 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.3550499002 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 675 350
No. of Characters: 3278 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.097 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.856 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 234 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 197 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.927 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5