The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the letter written to the editor of a local newspaper, states that a bicyle lane would help to mitigate the rush-hour traffic on the Blue Highway. The letter concludes this on the base of differents assupmtions, which are unpersuaive and illogical. Here are a few key factors to prove it.
First, a survey was taken in which the majority choose for a seperate lane on a the highway which would also widen it. The letter, claims that this won't help to curb the traffic by stating that a similar move was done on Green Highway and the traffic worsen. There are many reasons due to which the traffic might have increased like, it could have happen that the Green highway is not so wide compare to Blue highway, so more number of cars would be stuck one behind the other. It could also happen that the commuters used Green highway often more than the Blue highway. It could, also happen that there are fequent accidents on the Green highway compare to Blue highway, so it might be a reason of increase in the traffic. Unless, all the factors are not seen we canot conclude anything.
Secondly, the letter claims that by adding a bicycle lane, it would be more helpful to reduce the traffic. To state this claim, the letter mentions that the residents of many area are keen bicyclists. We cannot assume that the would prefer going to offices on a cycle as they like to cycle, it could also happen that the resident only cycle as a hobby and would perfer going to work in an automobile. It could also happen that the residents only prefer to travel by a cycle during winters and not during monsoon and summers to avoid the rains and heat. Unless, a proper survey is done and we don't know exactly how many residents are willing to go to offic on a cycle, it would be illiogical to add bicycle lane.
Thirdly, the letter claims that there has been rise in traffic during the rush-hour on Blue highway. It could happen that the rise in traffic could be due to different reason like a different route might be close down for maintence, as a result the traffic is diverted to the Blue highway. It could also be possible that the fees which the government collects on the Green highway might have increased, so the people are selecting to travel by Blue highway. So, without looking at these facts we cannot conclude that there is a need to add a bicycle lane on the highway.
In conclusion, residents may choose to travel by a bicycle if a bicycle lane is added, but it could happen that they do it only intially, and stop in the future. So, without analysing the facts and knowing the exact reason why is there a rise in traffic, we cannot just conclude or decide to build a bicycle lane on the highway.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.36 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.192 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.794 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.361 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
... majority choose for a seperate lane on a the highway which would also widen it. The ...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...ight have increased like, it could have happen that the Green highway is not so wide c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...be a reason of increase in the traffic. Unless, all the factors are not seen we canot ...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun area seems to be countable; consider using: 'many areas'.
Suggestion: many areas
...e letter mentions that the residents of many area are keen bicyclists. We cannot assume t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cle as a hobby and would perfer going to work in an automobile. It could also hap...
^^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... Unless, a proper survey is done and we dont know exactly how many residents are wil...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 495.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48888888889 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2878607264 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393939393939 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8774720768 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.1 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159971833536 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637665879075 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685410837353 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900811448731 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687920571105 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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