Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
In today's fasted-paced world, where talent is highly valued, it is crucial to pursue career in which one has mastery. Some might agree that immediate fame and recognition is better than having a long-term goal, whereas I disagree. I agree with the claim of the aforementioned statement and validation of my view would be presented in the following essay:
Goals are very dynamic in nature. Each person has some goals which they have set and they work accordingly to achieve it. Goal can be some two types; immediate or short-term goal, and long-term goal. Short-term goals are very basic in nature and the person wants to achieve it in next 3-5 years. Whereas, the long-term goal is the main aim of the person which he wants to achieve it in next 10-15 years. Amalgation of many short-term goals result in one long-term goal. A persons aim should to achieve the long-term goal and not getting distracted when his short-term goals are completed. From young age only people should be taught to stay dedicated to achieve their long-term goal. For instance, if an athlete wants to achieve a gold medal in Olympics then he or she needs to start prepare from where young age. They should participate in different tournaments to measure their progress. If they won a tournament they should not get overconfident and stop preparing as this would be harmful. The athlete should keep in mind that only their one of the short-term goals is completed and they still have to pursue their long-term goal.
In the last few decades, technological growth has been rapid, exponential, and limitless. Social media is the new hotspot. People are judge on the number of followers and views which a person gets on social media. To get famous instantly people are using various ways, and some of it are unenthical. By getting famous or receiving instant fame and recognition on social media does not garentee a successful career in future. But some people do not understand this and they would do anything to get famous on social media. For instance, pranking pedestants, or vandelizing displaces in the shops. Many youtubers even put their lifes in danger to gain some views. People should do things which would be helpful for them in future.
However, gaining instant fame does not also comes with a cost. It could happen that a geneuine talent of a person gets spread and that person gets help in his career. For instance, if an artistic painting gets virial then overnight he would be a star in the artistic communite. In this case the artitic should enjoy his success but at the same time he should also remember that his long-term goal is not yet achieve and he should not get side-track with this new earned fame.
In conclusion, people should focus on at the larger picture then seeing the immediate benefits as long-term goal are more satisfying and rewarding. Not denying the fact, that person should not enjoy or celebrate when his or her short-term goal are complete but at the same time remember in back of their mind that their true goal is still left and they should not stop until they have achieve it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 297, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... wants to achieve it in next 3-5 years. Whereas, the long-term goal is the main aim of ...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...a does not garentee a successful career in future. But some people do not understand this...
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Line 3, column 719, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... things which would be helpful for them in future. However, gaining instant fame does n...
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Line 4, column 45, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'come'
Suggestion: come
...ver, gaining instant fame does not also comes with a cost. It could happen that a gen...
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Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'achieved'.
Suggestion: achieved
...nd they should not stop until they have achieve it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, so, still, then, whereas, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78731343284 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52425304189 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432835820896 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4054940016 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4827586207 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4827586207 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10344827586 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34171945741 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100798723983 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968141924074 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188540619293 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760951134138 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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