The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument put forth here is that due to increased rush hour traffic on blue highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled the commuting time. To resolve this problem it is being proposed that a bicycle lane should be added on the highway which will incentivize the keen resident bicyclers to use this lane thereby reducing rush hour traffic. Another proposal of adding an additional lane of traffic was also made but was revoked due to failure of an additional highway on green highway last year which made the traffic problem worse. I cast my doubt on the validity of arguments put forward to support the conclusion and according to me, they require further evaluation.
It is possible that bicyclers may not use the specialized lane because they may be reluctant to ride on a national highway and may prefer local roads.
A proposal for addition of another lane on the highway was revoked citing the last year failure of additional lane on the Green Highway reducing such problem. This argument requires further evaluation as it is possible that that route was very busy and many people chose to use the highway abjuring the use of local roads thereby worsening the issue. It is possible that there may exist a flaw in the designing of that additional lane and may have caused a severe traffic jam. But an analysis of the failure of that project should be done and this additional lane on highway between suburbs and city center may resolve the current issue.
Further the authorities are planning to add an additional bicycle lane on the highway so that bicyclers would use this lane thereby reducing the problem. This arguments needs to be evaluated thoroughly. What if the cause of the jam is not bicyclers? What if the bicyclers are reluctant using a national highway due to increased speed of four wheeler? Will this proposal really solves the actual problem or will just provide an additional space for the traffic to move? These questions are to be thoroughly evaluated. May be and additional lane is the best solution to the problem.
Well, reaching at a conclusion so early may not solve this huge problem or may worsen this problem so authorities are advised to evaluate the proposal thoroughly and experts opinion should be sought and then any decision should be taken.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1882 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.765 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.48 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.527 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
... rush hour traffic. Another proposal of adding an additional lane of traffic was also made but was revoke...
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Line 6, column 41, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'add a bicycle'.
Suggestion: add a bicycle
...Further the authorities are planning to add an additional bicycle lane on the highway so that bicyclers w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 155, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...this lane thereby reducing the problem. This arguments needs to be evaluated thoroug...
^^^^
Line 6, column 170, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'need'.
Suggestion: need
...by reducing the problem. This arguments needs to be evaluated thoroughly. What if the...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 343, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'wheeler' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'wheelers'.
Suggestion: wheelers
... highway due to increased speed of four wheeler? Will this proposal really solves the a...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84810126582 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51382844286 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425316455696 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.865879925 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.647058824 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47058823529 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155424934498 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632718702548 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106475911665 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915318178914 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849535006372 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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