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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper."In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government c

Essay topics: The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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The letter concludes that Parson City residents place higher value on providing good education in public schools than the residents of Blue City. This conclusion of the letter is preceded by one main argument, the cities of the region Trillura differ in the budgetary priority they give to public education and that parson city has spent twice as much as blue city on public schools. It is natural for different cities to have different budgetary priorities according to the needs and problems of that particular city and so the arguer’s generalised conclusion based on the budgetary allocation of two cities is specious which renders it weak and as such needs to be scrutinised.

Firstly, the arguer points out that recently parson city has spent twice as much per year as Blue city on public schools. The arguer uses the word ‘recently’ which leads us to the question, is it only recently that Parson city has spent more on public schools. The arguer provides no information of the past expenditures of Parson city on public schools. It could be that in the past, Parson city didn’t spent anything at all on public schools, so now this one year they are spending almost twice. Blue city could have been more consistent on their spending on public schools on an yearly basis and as such no such exception were made for any particular year. So the arguer needs to get a detailed report on the amount allocation from budget on public schools from past years and compare to conclude the argument.
Secondly, the arguer doesn’t take into consideration the condition of the city run public schools in Parson city. There is no data on the number of such city run schools in Parson city. There could be many reasons for the allocation of more money for city run schools in parson city. What if there are very few city run schools in Parson city and they are spending more money to build more schools. Although the arguer mentions that they have equal number of residents in Parson city and blue city, but there is no mention of the number of school going kids in both the cities. Another reason could be that, the number of residents in blue city in the school goer age group is less and as such the government do not have to spend on building more schools.
So, the arguer’s conclusion doesn’t hold much ground as some basic questions have not been taken into consideration. The arguer should dig deeper with the budgetary priority of the cities from past year and check the statistics of the number of school going kids, the number of public and private school in both the cities to properly conclude his/her letter.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... on their spending on public schools on an yearly basis and as such no such except...
^^
Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'cities'?
Suggestion: cities
...parson city. What if there are very few city run schools in Parson city and they are...
^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.287109375 0.25644967241 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.125 0.15541462614 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.11328125 0.0836205057962 135% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0390625 0.0520304965353 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0234375 0.0272364105082 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142578125 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.03125 0.0416121511921 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57570155361 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.01953125 0.026700313972 73% => OK
Particles: 0.001953125 0.001811407834 108% => OK
Determiners: 0.103515625 0.113004496875 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.009765625 0.0255425247493 38% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.005859375 0.0127820249294 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2652.0 2731.13054187 97% => OK
No of words: 459.0 446.07635468 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77777777778 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.326797385621 0.378187486979 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.196078431373 0.287650121315 68% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161220043573 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100217864924 0.135150697306 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57570155361 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 207.018472906 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398692810458 0.469332199767 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.8443072609 52.1807786196 84% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5200882617 57.7814097925 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.0 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.411764705882 0.724660767414 57% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 46.6078431373 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 2.45833333333 1.8405768891 134% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.644153205725 0.441005458295 146% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.210497053573 0.135418324435 155% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100909461666 0.0829849096947 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.647585576828 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107867230493 0.147661913831 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.339036856765 0.193483328276 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121375261058 0.0970749176394 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.517971829706 0.42659136922 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0749105136663 0.0774707102158 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.499486680873 0.312017818177 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063905436011 0.0698173142475 92% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.33743842365 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 11.0 5.36822660099 205% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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