At the first look, the firm’s recommendation of investmenting in Consolidated Industries seems logical. But, there are some underlying assumptions on which this recommendation is based. More clarification is needed in this context before investing in Consolidated Industries.
The letter clearly says that most homes in the northeastern United States have TRADITIONALLY used oil as their major fuel for heating. Since we are living in the present and not in the past, basing our decision on practices of the past is anything but logical. Here, the writer of the letter assumes that since oil has been used as major fuel for heating, it will continue to be the major fuel. But, we live in a rapidly changing world. It is highly likely that oil would have been replaced by some other new technology which is more usable and energy efficient. Having said that, investment in Consolidated Industries might not be a good idea.
Considering that oil is still northeastern United States’ most preferred fuel for heating, the letter takes support of the climate forecasters’ prediction to advice investing in Consolidated Industries. There is an assumption that since the region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, there would be an increase in the usage of the heaters. It might be possible that the winters were otherwise warmer and only colder in this 90 days period. This case does not support an increased ussage of the heaters. Or maybe decrease in the temperature happended during the summer season which again did not increase the heaters’ usage. In these cases where no increase in the heater usage has been experienced, investment in Consolidated Industries might not be fruitful.
Let us say that the recent weather changes have actually lead to an increase in oil heater usage. The letter bases its advice on the climate forecasters and predicts the increase in the usage is going to sustain itself in the future. Assumption here is that climate forecasters are reliable. Their track records need to be studied before making this assumption because if that is not the case then the advice might turn out to be useless.
If it happens to be the case that there would actually be an incearsed usage in oil heater in the future, investment in Consolidated Industries might still not be a good idea. The wiriter assumes that increase in the demand of oil heaters in northeastern United States means increase sales of oil heater manufactured by Consolidated Industries. What if people there prefer some other brand? What if Consolidated Industries is infamous amongst people of northeastern United States? Brand favourites should be found out before suggesting to invert in Consolidated Industries.
These are some of the assumptions on which the investment recommendation relies. Only after clarification of the above should the client act.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: At the first look, the firm's recommendation of investmenting in Consolidated Industries seems logical.
Error: investmenting Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There is an assumption that since the region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, there would be an increase in the usage of the heaters.
Error: below-normal Suggestion: below normal
Sentence: This case does not support an increased ussage of the heaters.
Error: ussage Suggestion: usage
Sentence: Or maybe decrease in the temperature happended during the summer season which again did not increase the heaters' usage.
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: happended Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: If it happens to be the case that there would actually be an incearsed usage in oil heater in the future, investment in Consolidated Industries might still not be a good idea.
Error: incearsed Suggestion: increased
Sentence: The wiriter assumes that increase in the demand of oil heaters in northeastern United States means increase sales of oil heater manufactured by Consolidated Industries.
Error: wiriter Suggestion: writer
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- better to agree that climate forecasters are reliable.
argument 4 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2348 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.004 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ase in the temperature happended during the summer season which again did not increase the heater...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
...he recent weather changes have actually lead to an increase in oil heater usage. The...
^^^^
Line 9, column 526, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggesting inverting'.
Suggestion: suggesting inverting
...d favourites should be found out before suggesting to invert in Consolidated Industries. These ar...
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Line 11, column 11, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...n Consolidated Industries. These are some of the assumptions on which the investment rec...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, may, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23275862069 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03546222437 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448275862069 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4897862957 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3846153846 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248749851707 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06971600538 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11345347689 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123884278427 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095779062917 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.