The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client."Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienc

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The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client.
"Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced twenty days with below-average temperatures, and local weather forecasters throughout the region predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because of these developments, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

It seems to be logical, at first glance, to agree with the argument that we should invest in Consolidated industries, because we are expecting increase sales of home heating oil, given that the weather forecast predicts that weather pattern of twenty days with below-average temperatures will continue for several more years. However, the author suffers from many grave fallacies in its assumptions. And in order to fully evaluate the argument, we need a significant amount of additional evidences.

The first piece of evidence we need to collect is the weather conditions in the previous years. The author failed to provide any information regarding historical weather situation. It is possible that previously, the region is experiencing longer period of below average temperatures, such as thirty days or even longer. The author also fails to provide the comparison of the actual temperature between past years and this year. It is also possible that previously, the weather is -30 degrees, compared to -20 degrees nowadays. In both case, this weather pattern can lead to decrease in oil consumption instead of increase.

Another fallacy is that new homes do not naturally lead to higher consumption of oil. There are many factors which impacts whether people will leave in these new homes, which author failed to take into consideration. For example, if the new home is poorly constructed, and suffers from quality problems, it is highly likely that very few people will move in to these homes. What if these new homes are mot accompanied with sufficient facilities, such as the schools are too far away, or there is no garage built nearby? Even if we assume that the newly built homes have high quality, and is likely to attract residents, we also need to consider when will these residents actually moves in. What if the market is stale and very few people are looking for homes. All these factors may impact the number of residents in these newly built homes in the upcoming years. Therefore, it is important that the arguer provides evidence that the newly built homes is highly likely to attract large number of residents in the short term, to ensure that his argument is more cogent and convincing.

Moreover, the arguer also needs to research on whether there is any alternative fuel for heating. The simple fact that people traditionally use oil as major fuel does not necessarily guarantee that it is going to be the case in the future. With the development of technology, new heating methodologies have evolved, and can be gradually replacing the market share of traditional oil. The arguer must complete an industry research on whether there is any alternative heating methodology.

What is more, even if we assume that the region is going to experience lower temperature in future years and oil will remain to be the major fuel for heating, more consumption of oil does not represent more profit for the companies. What if many other companies have made the same forecast, and invest more on this industry as well? In that case, the competition of the industry will become more severe, leading to more marketing expenses and lower profit margin. As we all know, revenue is quantity multiplying price. Even if quantity increases, with decrease in price, the revenue can decrease as a result. On the other hand, profit is revenue minus cost, even if we assume revenue goes up because of the larger consumption, high costs can result in a lower profit. The arguer needs to collect more evidence on the competitors in order to prove that the costs will not significantly go up due to potential competition in the market.

Without the evidence that the temperature of this region are lower than past years, and that the newly built homes are actually going to attracts residents, we cannot be convinced that the there will be higher demand for heating fuel. And without a detailed analysis to prove that oil is continuously going to be the major heating fuel, and the consolidated industry is going to maintain its profit margin, the argument is simply not cogent enough to persuade the client.

To sum up, the recommendation about an investment to an oil retail sale operation is fallible due to its shaky assumptions. The author overlooks the potential questions hidden behind which are also indispensable for such a significant investment. To strengthen the reliability and persuasiveness, the author should offer more accurate weather pattern in the long run and the potential technological revolution, as well as the detailed information of CI and the comparative results with other operations. Or there will be a high risk of wasting money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 138, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'attract'.
Suggestion: attract
...newly built homes are actually going to attracts residents, we cannot be convinced that ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'to sum up', 'what is more', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231492361927 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.151586368978 0.15541462614 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112808460635 0.0836205057962 135% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0658049353702 0.0520304965353 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0235017626322 0.0272364105082 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122209165687 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0305522914219 0.0416121511921 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78653028872 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0376028202115 0.026700313972 141% => OK
Particles: 0.00235017626322 0.001811407834 130% => OK
Determiners: 0.10223266745 0.113004496875 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021151586369 0.0255425247493 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00940070505288 0.0127820249294 74% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4671.0 2731.13054187 171% => OK
No of words: 774.0 446.07635468 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.03488372093 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.27454789404 4.57801047555 115% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361757105943 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263565891473 0.287650121315 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184754521964 0.208842608468 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12015503876 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78653028872 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 207.018472906 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417312661499 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.8837879601 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 34.0 20.039408867 170% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7647058824 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2036225427 57.7814097925 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.382352941 141.986410481 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.14285714286 136% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.1212950296 51.9672348444 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.59512195122 1.8405768891 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342562657742 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124560986855 0.135418324435 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0854442419443 0.0829849096947 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531596021207 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155789923744 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133380934886 0.193483328276 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599623773902 0.0970749176394 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427845144742 0.42659136922 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0428708456706 0.0774707102158 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238909599222 0.312017818177 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214318010793 0.0698173142475 31% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.87684729064 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 13.0 5.36822660099 242% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 27.0 14.657635468 184% => OK

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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