In the memo, the author concludes that his or her client must invest in Consolidate Industries, one of whose main business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil. The author reaches this conclusion based on the fact that homes in the northeastern United States conventionally have used oil as the main source of heating their home and owing to weather prediction by climate forecasters at Waymarsh University that the winters in the following years in this region will be freezing. Moreover, many new homes have been constructed during the past years in this area. Nonetheless, while the conclusion drawn by the writer might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, the author must address the following three questions.
First of all, are the predictions by weather forecasters at Waymarsh University reliable? It is probable that forecasters in this university consist of many students with a lack of proper knowledge or experience in predicting the weather pattern. Also, the published data might be the group project of a course or an industrial project of a professor of which he or she delegates some parts to students who are prone to make mistakes. If either of these scenarios has merit, then the author's assertion that based on the published data by the university, the following winter will be freezing in the area is substantially hampered.
Secondly, are new house builders still in favour of using oil as the main source of heating the house? Traditionally, people in this region have used oil to heat their houses, maybe because other heating sources were unaffordable or incompatible with the design of their homes. The new house-builders might use other sources to warm the buildings, which do not require oil. The argument does not hold water if the above is true.
Finally, what other fields do Consolidate Industries participate in? These industries might work in different areas, most of which are not profitable or make a profit after a long time. Investing in these industries only based on the fact that they produce oil which might be in great need in the future, is not logical. Besides, if other regions in the United States do not use oil to heat their house and the demand for oil in this region reduces in the future, the investors might lose a considerable amount of their money. If it is true that Consolidate Industries' other fields of occupations are not profitable or other regions do not use oil to heat their homes, the credibility of the writer's claim decreases significantly.
To recapitulate, it is possible that investing in Consolidate Industries, one of the business operations of which is the retail sale of home heating oil, will provide the client with a significant amount of money since the frosty weather pattern will be reiterated in the following years in this region, and people living in this region will stick to use of oil as the primary source of heating their homes. Nevertheless, as it stands now, the argument relies on three unanswered questions that render its conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Therefore, the author must provide answers to all the abovementioned staple questions.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 542 350
No. of Characters: 2684 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.825 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.952 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.539 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... of these scenarios has merit, then the authors assertion that based on the published d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2748.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 542.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07011070111 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91993624857 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452029520295 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.3947102618 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.857142857 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8095238095 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61904761905 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251113554543 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703334063867 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810821197587 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145381457424 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696243727601 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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