The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams
Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many
of whom work only parttime.Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that
of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000.
Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and
it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with
Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a
good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument.
Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications
are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this argument, about the two real estate firms, writer is making assumptions based on datas and evidences which need to be more specific and thorough. On the basis of limited support, the writer’s judgement that Adams Realty is better than Fitch Realty, doesn’t hold good and requires more indepth research and analysis.
The argument made by the writer is based on assumptions made on data which is looked upon superficially, things should have been looked at closely and in more detailed manner.The writer begins his argument by saying that Adams Realty has more number of employees than Fitch Realty. Here, we need to understand that having more number of employees doesn;t necessarily mean that the larger employee firm is efficient than the other. Maybe, Fitch realty is a more efficient firm working with lesser employees and producing intended results. Also, the argument says that most of the employees in Fitch realty are working on part time basis but no mention whatsoever is made about the number of employees in Adams Realty which work on part time basis- maybe almost all the forty employees in Adams Realty work on part time basis. Furthermore, in the argument it is said that Adams realty revenue in the last year, was twice that of Fitch’s Realty and also Adams’s had home sales that averaged $168,000 compared to a figure of $144,000 for Fitch. Now, this argument is merely representing numbers but what is required to be looked at is, the nature and characteristics of real estates sold by these two firms- maybe Adams Realty in the last year, has been more involved in properties which are in prime locations and which are larger in size or simply to state that Adams realty might be selling the “hot” properties in the market in the last year whereas, Fitch realty in its last year hasn’t been selling prime properties or properties that are not as good as Adams. So,inspite of not selling as many good properties as Adams, Fitch Realty’s average home sales is not far behind Adams Realty. So, the argument fall apart when there is no mention of the characteristics of properties involved.
Furthermore, the writer cites one of his personal experience when he says that, about 10 years ago he had listed one of his homes with Fitch Realty and it took them about 4 months to sell that house. On the other hand, Adams Realty took only a month to sell off the writers another home just about a year ago. Now, this comparison made by the author fails totally when there is no due respect paid to the fact that both the occurrences mentioned by the author happened years apart. Maybe, about a 10years ago, real estate was not in a good state at all – maybe the real estate market had collapsed and properties were not at all getting sold. On the other hand, when Adams Realty sold another home in a month just about a year ago, during that time real estate market might have been in very good shape and properties were selling really faster. Also, other doesn’t make any mention about the characteristics of both the properties, maybe the property that Adams Realty sold was one in a prime location and the one that Fitch Realty sold was not in a good location. So, again the writer’s argument doesn’t consider all aspects and falls short.
Furthermore, the argument could have been strengthened had it taken into account many things- such as the comparing the properties that both the Real estate firms have been selling, mention of number of employees in Adams Realty who work part time and full time, due consideration of the fact that two periods could be different to another and so, comparing a property sold about 10years ago with a one that has been sold about a year ago, seems invalid.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... at closely and in more detailed manner.The writer begins his argument by saying t...
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Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...The writer begins his argument by saying that Adams Realty has more number of emp...
^^
Line 2, column 622, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...mployees in Fitch realty are working on part time basis but no mention whatsoever is made...
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Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...employees in Adams Realty which work on part time basis- maybe almost all the forty emplo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 810, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...forty employees in Adams Realty work on part time basis. Furthermore, in the argument it ...
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Line 2, column 1329, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: larger
...ch are in prime locations and which are larger in size or simply to state that Adams realty mi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1588, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , inspite
...erties that are not as good as Adams. So,inspite of not selling as many good properties ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1795, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is no mention of the characteristics of properties involved. Furthermore, the w...
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Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...r of employees in Adams Realty who work part time and full time, due consideration of the...
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Line 4, column 253, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... in Adams Realty who work part time and full time, due consideration of the fact that two...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, really, so, then, whereas, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 13.6137724551 213% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3125.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 648.0 441.139720559 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8225308642 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04537849152 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5806894409 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385802469136 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 954.0 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.367619377 57.8364921388 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.611111111 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 23.324526521 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255585859284 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102182616441 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600053120467 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176042016434 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527298052732 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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