4 The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged \$168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the letter, the author suggest his friend that he should use Adams Realty if he want to sell his home quickly and at a good price. Although Adams Realty may sell houses as quickly as the author suggested, the argument proposed is base on numerous of unfounded assumptions. Unless the author can provide more evidence to support these assumptions, it is reasonable to question if the recommendation will be true as the author claimed.
First of all, the author compares the number of real estate agents who employed at two firms to support his argument. However, it appears that author simply assumes that more full time real estates agents a firm employs will result in a better price and faster process while selling homes. It is possible that every agent from Adams real estate have to include more home sells and have little time for each case to bargain for a better price. It is also likely that in order to expand their business Adams tried to hire as many agents as they can. Even though they have more agent in staff, Adams is less professional in home sell compare to Fitch. If these situation proved to be true, it is questionable to ask if Adams can provide a better service in home sells.
What is more, the author mention that Adams' revenue was twice as high as that of Fitch last year in order to prove that it is better to use Adams. However, the assumption that if a company earned a better revenue last year, they will provide a better service than other company is obviously unreasonable. It is possible that the Adams achieve the high revenue by the expensive fees they charge for every home sales they make, which makes Adams even more expensive. Adams may tried to sell large amount of houses last year regardless of the price in order to achieve a better revenue. If any of these situation turns out to be true, it is reasonable to suggest that it is not a good idea to sell homes via Adams real estate.
Last but not least. The authors use two home sells he experienced with Adams and Fitch in order to prove that it is faster to sell home with Adams. However, it is impossible to assume that the housing market will stay the same over ten years and the reason why the first home sells with Fitch is entirely due to the company in stead of the changes happened in the housing market. It is likely that the second home is more easier to sell due to the better economic environment. What is more, it is possible that Adams were trying to sell homes as fast as they can and didn't bargained for a good price for the second home since the author didn't mention about the price for two cases.
Generally speaking, in order to provide a reasonable suggestion. The author need to provide more home sells cases from two company within a reasonable time frame to show which company will be able to get a better price and faster speeds in home sell.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 525 350
No. of Characters: 2301 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.787 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.383 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.196 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.875 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...d that he should use Adams Realty if he want to sell his home quickly and at a good ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...rs that author simply assumes that more full time real estates agents a firm employs will...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l estate have to include more home sells and have little time for each case to ba...
^^
Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
...ional in home sell compare to Fitch. If these situation proved to be true, it is questionable t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 325, Rule ID: IN_STEAD_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
...th Fitch is entirely due to the company in stead of the changes happened in the housing mar...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 418, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...t. It is likely that the second home is more easier to sell due to the better economic envi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 568, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...g to sell homes as fast as they can and didnt bargained for a good price for the seco...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 638, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ce for the second home since the author didnt mention about the price for two cases. ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 523.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51434034417 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26294003486 2.78398813304 81% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397705544933 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3556367704 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9047619048 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185144470606 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672632591624 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478602261464 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1105858701 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605224572677 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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