The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The letter from a homeowner to a friend presents how two leading real state firms, the Adams Realty and the Fitch Realty, work, showing and comparing the number of agents, time to sell a house and the price that a home sale could have.
In the first place, the letter gives the information that Adams has more agents than Fitch, which the first one have forty real estate agents, whereas the second one has only twenty five and most of them are only part-time agents. This information is vital to explain why the revenue of Adams Realty was two times bigger than the Fitch Realty. In addition, an average sales on Adams has also a high value when compared with Fitch and, futhermore, a house listed on Adams is capable of selling easily than Fitch.
A company that have more employees is capable of generating more sells and is more competitive on the market. On the other hand, this could generate an excess of people, gerenerating unused member. However, that is not the reality from the town of the homeowner, at least, when the two companies are compared. Twenty five part-time agents are showing an defict of productivity in the Fitch Realty firm. Their staff is not capable of making the house sells in the same speed of Adams, and due to this fact, the costumers are prefering selling their houses on Adams Realty.
Moreover, Adams Realty created a more prestigious company on the market, that alows to them to sells theirs houses with a bigger price. That work in the same way of clothing sells, like “Nike” or “Levis” have a famous label, so people trust on their products and they can increase the final value of their sells, even if it’s higher than they realy are. The same is happening with Adams, how they have more employees and they capable of selling houses in a fast way, people are choosing their services even they increase the price of the sells.
In adittion, it’s not clear in the letter if that bigger price is passed to the houseowner. The writer just compares the final price of home sales, however, it is expected that the Adams Realty have a bigger commision in the final value than the Fitch Realty, because Adams have more employees than Realty, giving to them a higher cost on the end of the month. Therefore, the owner needs to evaluate if a bigger comission is worth.
In conclusion, the letter compares data from two firms that sells houses in a same town. It seems that Adams Realty have more interesting sells because of their bigger number of agents and that could created on the market a more known company than Fitch. At the same time, the letter doesn’t show any other information of the firm’s commision, so the higher average sales price of Adams might be also from bigger taxes that the costumers need to pay to the company. In other words, it’s important to evaluate all the aspects of a company in order to give an final score to then. In that case, some assumptions was made, but even with that, the Adams Realty realy like to be a better company than Fitch Realty.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In addition, an average sales on Adams has also a high value when compared with Fitch and, futhermore, a house listed on Adams is capable of selling easily than Fitch.
Error: futhermore Suggestion: furthermore
Sentence: On the other hand, this could generate an excess of people, gerenerating unused member.
Error: gerenerating Suggestion: generating
Sentence: Twenty five part-time agents are showing an defict of productivity in the Fitch Realty firm.
Error: defict Suggestion: deficit
Error: part-time Suggestion: part time
Sentence: Their staff is not capable of making the house sells in the same speed of Adams, and due to this fact, the costumers are prefering selling their houses on Adams Realty.
Error: prefering Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Moreover, Adams Realty created a more prestigious company on the market, that alows to them to sells theirs houses with a bigger price.
Error: alows Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: That work in the same way of clothing sells, like Nike or Levis have a famous label, so people trust on their products and they can increase the final value of their sells, even if it's higher than they realy are.
Error: realy Suggestion: rely
Sentence: In adittion, it's not clear in the letter if that bigger price is passed to the houseowner.
Error: houseowner Suggestion: homeowner
Error: adittion Suggestion: action
Sentence: The writer just compares the final price of home sales, however, it is expected that the Adams Realty have a bigger commision in the final value than the Fitch Realty, because Adams have more employees than Realty, giving to them a higher cost on the end of the month.
Error: commision Suggestion: commission
Sentence: Therefore, the owner needs to evaluate if a bigger comission is worth.
Error: comission Suggestion: commission
Sentence: At the same time, the letter doesn't show any other information of the firm's commision, so the higher average sales price of Adams might be also from bigger taxes that the costumers need to pay to the company.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Error: commision Suggestion: commission
Sentence: In that case, some assumptions was made, but even with that, the Adams Realty realy like to be a better company than Fitch Realty.
Error: realy Suggestion: rely
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 540 350
No. of Characters: 2406 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.821 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.456 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.133 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.858 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...wenty five part-time agents are showing an defict of productivity in the Fitch Rea...
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Line 4, column 477, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a fast way" with adverb for "fast"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...yees and they capable of selling houses in a fast way, people are choosing their services eve...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 570, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e aspects of a company in order to give an final score to then. In that case, some...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, whereas, at least, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, in the first place, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 539.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68089053803 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38756264604 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404452690167 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2253324178 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.15 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.95 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35 5.70786347227 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269028885149 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969046122141 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837795795047 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181321973389 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973734994247 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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