It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
The neighborhood that we grow up and live in is a very important part of our lives. It is where we met our first friends, our first conflicts, and where we learn more about life. If a new movie theater will be built in my neighborhood, some people I’m sure would believe that it is a great idea; other would disagree. In my view, the construction of a new entertainment place would be a positive addition to my city for two important reasons.
The main reason is that it will improve the shopping area around the movie theater. The new place will attract more residents for this area, thus more people will be looking for places to go before and after movies sections. In that way, businesses like bars, restaurants and pubs will start to increase with the new niche of people. Hence, not only the theater will make money but also other small stores around it. For example, the first movie theater that was built in my hometown, Bauru, in 2010. Before that, the region where the theater was built had almost no place to go in the evening. The commerce was based just in popular clothes store which opened their door from 10am to 6pm. After the construction of the movie theater the change in the streets was amazing. New companies started to buy these old stores and built high-tech places. I remember that the first city’s McDonalds was built in that time. So, me and my also also went there to eat a sandwich after a movie. As you can see, the implementation of the theater also brought improvements to the neighborhood.
Another reason is that the movie theater will increase the number of jobs for residents. Many people who are looking for a place to word could find an opportunity in the new jobs. Since positions as architects, engineers and construction workers for the initial phases of the theater, also as cashiers, cleaners and technicians for the operational phase. Giving an opportunity for a lot of different town’s habitants. For instance, I remember my friend John that was looking for a job for more than two years. He was living with his uncle and having a very bad time without a job. After the construction of the movie theater in downtown, a lot of job opportunities were open for residents. The pre requisites are just to live close to the place and have a high school diploma, perfects for John. Thus, my friend applied to the position of cashier. Fortunately, he was accepted with more twenty other employees .This experience taught me that new businesses could be also be very beneficial for people that lived close to them.
In sum, though some may oppose the plan, the construction of a new movie theater would be great to my neighborhood. Not only will increase the shopping area around the theater but also will bring more job opportunities for residents. Every city should work to introduce new entertainment places, such as movie theaters, to their community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73228346457 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67283693631 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468503937008 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5258205386 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8965517241 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5172413793 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31034482759 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154265845517 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509253336189 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053105218225 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117024828668 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418266384344 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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