The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In this letter to the manager, the owner of Sunnyside Towers concludes that that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow in all of the twelve buildings will dramatically increase the profits. However before we evaluate the prediction, Below three questions below need to be answered.
First of all, How effective is it modify showerheads? In other words the owner of the Sunnyside Towers has assumed that most amount of water usage is through the shower and thereby modifying the shower heads to reduce the water pressure. It may be possible that a very tiny fraction of residents living in Sunnyside Towers use shower frequently, if at all. It is also might be that the water usage is primarily from other activities like dishwashing, laundry, watering etc. Even if the shower is major water usage, residents may take a longer time in the shower due to the low pressure, therefore, negating any benefit owner might enjoy.
Secondly, Will, the residents agree to the modification? Residents of Sunnyside Towers may not agree to this change at all in the first place as the owner has already received multiple complaints about the low pressured showerheads. It is also possible that residents can find out other alternatives to this modification. Maybe they can call in a local plumber to fix it as per their desired pressure, in turn increasing the pressure of the water higher than before. Thereby not only does the owner not get the desired results but also will lead to higher usage of water and also will lead to unwanted expenses of new low pressure showerheads and also the expenses of plumber thereby reducing the profits altogether.
Last of all, Are the complaints of residents have been looked into thoroughly? According to the owner, Residents of first three buildings have reported complaints after the change of showerheads. It is possible that residents are seriously facing issues and want these to be addressed. Moreover, residents can get frustrated upon lack of interest shown by the owner to address the grievances. This may cause effects in the long run. Residents may file complaints on the owner and thereby damaging the Sunnyside corporation name which may detract new potential residents. Moreover, current residents who are living on a temporary basis may also find a new home somewhere else. This will cause a long term effect and reduce the income.
The conclusion given by the owner of Sunnyside Towers that modifying the showerheads to reduce the pressure will increase the current profits dramatically may be true. But as it stands the above three questions of the effectiveness of modification, Residents approval and complaints addressal needs to be answered in-depth to further evaluate the prediction.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2250 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.011 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.702 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.75 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.762 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.324 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 72, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...the owner of Sunnyside Towers concludes that that modifying showerheads to restrict water...
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Line 2, column 130, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...g showerheads to restrict water flow in all of the twelve buildings will dramatically incr...
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Line 2, column 198, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...will dramatically increase the profits. However before we evaluate the prediction, Belo...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Even if the shower is major water usage, residents may take a longer time in the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, first of all, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12249443207 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80028711537 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45434298441 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6196430024 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.545454545 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4090909091 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208607867049 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699271312786 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082839233304 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145652022585 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698745652693 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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