The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the letter from the Owner of the sunnyside Tower apartment complex to the manager, it is stated that modifying the shower heads by restricting the water flow throughout all the twelve buildings will help to increase the profit dirastically. However, before this recommendation is properly evaluated some questions must be answered.
Firstly, author assumes that, controlling the water flow will decrease the consumption or usage rate as well. As, one will use the amount of water that he or she feels is enough to wash up their body irrespective to the rate o fflow of water. Moreover, proponent has failed in giving information, that what was the water usage before and what is the water usage ,now, after the modification? As the whole prompt is based on the fact that the consumption of the water will decrease and make the modification profitable for the apartment owner.
Secondly, owner is so sure that the corporation will be profitable after the adjustment; however, there is no clear basis or evidence to relay on to support that the cost of corporation will decrease. Also, the complaints about the water pressure is irerlevant to the rate of consumption of water or the initial three buildings had higher water pressure than the normal so the complaints were relatively less. Author must provide us with the evidence to establish the relation between lower pressure and savings of water, for the prompt to be properly evaluated.
Lastly, the author has made the assumption that the changing the water pressure of three appartment will be same as that for the twelwe apartment. As, the complaints are likely to increase and if they have to remodify the shower heads again as the original one then there will be additional loss rather than the profit.
In conclusion, the prompt as it is relies on the unwarrented assumption. So, the additional information must be provided answering aforementioned questions. Then, only we can properly evaluate the reliability of the prompt.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1623 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.933 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.782 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...irstly, author assumes that, controlling the water flow will decrease the consump...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...usage before and what is the water usage ,now, after the modification? As the whol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08814589666 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85763107773 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51367781155 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4113066259 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.571428571 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186201960461 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598358303177 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934769762998 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105693921122 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100884297189 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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