The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.
"Seven years ago, homeowners in the nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."
The argument seems to be well presented and sound at first glance : because the property values of the nearby Brookville Community have increased 3 fold in the last 7 years due to landscaping and colour matching. However as more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned the argument suffers from grave fallacies and unwarranted assumption. Before this letter can be implemented the following arguments must be taken into consideration.
Firstly , the homeowners of Brookville had adopted these restriction seven years ago. This means that in the past seven years there could have been a dramatic change in populace.Maybe the young and highly paid millennials could now prefer customised landscaping and their preferred colours over the uniform colour and landscaping pattern. Maybe the old and pensioned segment of population are unable to maintain the landscaping and are preferring to move out. If the above arguments are true then the measure could do more harm than good.
Secondly, We cannot compare Brookville with Deerhaven Acres. Maybe Brookville is in an urban setting where there is faster appreciation on property values and Deerhaven Acres could be in a rural setting with slower appreciation. It could also be the case that Brookville has better road connectivity and is having better infrastructure then Deerhaven Acres. This could be the reason for the increase in property values. If the above arguments are true then the argument does not hold ground.
Thirdly, It could be that the last seven years could be a part of the upward economic cycle and now the economy is looking for a bad rescission activity. Maybe people are looking a housing bubble burst like 2008 crisis.This means that the people will not be interested in buying houses and neither will the value of property increase since there is no buyer. If the argument hold good then the efforts of Deerhaven heights can be ruined.
Lastly, Brookville could have larger and grander houses that are more appealing to the rich and wealthy whereas Deerhaven acres can have a smaller houses which tend to have a slower rate of appreciation in property value compared to richer areas.
Overall, the letter is far from forceful enough to persuade the residents of Deerhaven Acres to implement landscaping and uniform colour pattern. Before any final decisions are made to implement the recommendations much work is left for the arguer to do to make his/her argument more logical and cogent.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2044 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.174 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.31 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument seems to be well presented and sound at first glance : because the ...
^^
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...due to landscaping and colour matching. However as more light is shed on the issue and ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd more detailed facts are concerned the argument suffers from grave fallacies an...
^^
Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e fallacies and unwarranted assumption. Before this letter can be implemented the foll...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...st be taken into consideration. Firstly , the homeowners of Brookville had adopte...
^^
Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
...have been a dramatic change in populace.Maybe the young and highly paid millennials c...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... unable to maintain the landscaping and are preferring to move out. If the above arguments are...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...scaping and are preferring to move out. If the above arguments are true then the m...
^^
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on for the increase in property values. If the above arguments are true then the a...
^^
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...a housing bubble burst like 2008 crisis.This means that the people will not be inter...
^^^^
Line 4, column 359, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...perty increase since there is no buyer. If the argument hold good then the efforts...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11793611794 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75057104018 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515970515971 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1146024864 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.722222222 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178802444623 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615671329911 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773868235853 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866631858168 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027011882664 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.